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Comment from Earl Corp
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I'm sure Jason is looking down and is very honored and humbled by your writing about him. Remember we die twice. The first time physically and the final time when your name is spoken for the last time.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
    Thanks Earl deeply appreciated.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from omerta16
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If you don't mind, I'm interested in hearing some backround on this poem. I'm pretty sure it's a poem, though listed as a chapter in a book. Is there two interlocutors or is this a soliloquy? The question marks kind of confused me at a few points. It feels like there's something substantial being touched upon here but that I'm missing it. The fifth line of the last stanza has 'wad' where I think it's meant to be 'was'. That single error made me question if some of the punctuation, specifically some of the question marks, were intentional or maybe formatting errors or just typos. I like the feel of inner turmoil and conflict that is felt immediately, which kept me reading. Hope to hear back, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
    Conversation between Father below and sound above.
    Thanks,
    Ricky