Daughter Talk.
Personal Walk...5 total reviews
Comment from R56Ma3
I like the word and sentence structure, they harmonize very well. I love how the father, daughter relationship builds on the bonding, creates a healthy family. Very well written!
R56ma3
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I like the word and sentence structure, they harmonize very well. I love how the father, daughter relationship builds on the bonding, creates a healthy family. Very well written!
R56ma3
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
A very good writing. I did not frown. I smiled remembering my spankings as a child. Children need discipline to grow into worthwhile adults. And children need a good father who loves and directs his child in the way he should go. Well done.
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A very good writing. I did not frown. I smiled remembering my spankings as a child. Children need discipline to grow into worthwhile adults. And children need a good father who loves and directs his child in the way he should go. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Rhonnie, I am so glad I have the chance to review another of your posts.
I find that these story dialogs that you post to help everyone recognize healthy interpersonal relationships, is a real contribution to the FanStory site.
I hope many of the young men who read FS will start learning from your examples, because one day they too will become fathers.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Dear Rhonnie, I am so glad I have the chance to review another of your posts.
I find that these story dialogs that you post to help everyone recognize healthy interpersonal relationships, is a real contribution to the FanStory site.
I hope many of the young men who read FS will start learning from your examples, because one day they too will become fathers.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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HELLO SUSANNA: I thank you for complementing on my poem. You are appreciated. I'm so glad that you have a chance to review another of my posts. If our good, Lord, is willing...you will get many more chances, dear lady. I agree with you. People helping people is what our lives are all about.
God bless you, Suzanna. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like this poem for it has a natural, soft, filial, lovely narrative taletelling about daughter's love, father's love, care, affection to daughter, treating daughter to make father's boss; well said, well done.
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I like this poem for it has a natural, soft, filial, lovely narrative taletelling about daughter's love, father's love, care, affection to daughter, treating daughter to make father's boss; well said, well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
Comment from samandlancelot
Rhonnie,
This is a cute poem of a girl who likes her dad, even when he needs to punish her.
That's exactly what he goes out and buy." (The way you have this written, your last word should be buys. But if you want a perfect rhyme, you need to reword it, perhaps "that's exactly what he'll go out and buy."
He says he gives me all he's got, and suffer (suffers) no loss."
Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Rhonnie,
This is a cute poem of a girl who likes her dad, even when he needs to punish her.
That's exactly what he goes out and buy." (The way you have this written, your last word should be buys. But if you want a perfect rhyme, you need to reword it, perhaps "that's exactly what he'll go out and buy."
He says he gives me all he's got, and suffer (suffers) no loss."
Patricia
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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HELLO SAMANDLANCELOT: I thank you for complementing on my poem. You are appreciated. Thank you for your proof-reading and editing suggestions. They will make the poem read better. Again...thank you. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.