From Better to Worse
It gets harder with time15 total reviews
Comment from RetroStarfish
So clever and, yes, I jump for joy at alliteration. You also have a nifty way of riffing off analogies:
"Time: that phony faith healer. Father Time's mindless flock spews such an insipid chorus of "rah, rah, rah"--baa, baa, baa--about toughing it out to the other side of Mount Misery."
Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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So clever and, yes, I jump for joy at alliteration. You also have a nifty way of riffing off analogies:
"Time: that phony faith healer. Father Time's mindless flock spews such an insipid chorus of "rah, rah, rah"--baa, baa, baa--about toughing it out to the other side of Mount Misery."
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Hello again! Always a pleasure.
Thankfully, I had little contact with my ex; he just honked the horn -- held it down! -- until the kids came running. Finally, one day my neighbor reamed him out for being a DICK leaning on the horn-- the guy scared him so that thereafter he tapped it gently. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from papa55mike
That would be hard to see your ex in a club then they want to be friends. I don't see how that works. What a wonderfully written story. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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That would be hard to see your ex in a club then they want to be friends. I don't see how that works. What a wonderfully written story. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Let's hope that never the twain shall meet! Cheers. LIZ
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You and I think alike! Thankfully, I had little contact with my ex; he just honked the horn -- held it down! -- until the kids came running. Finally, one day my neighbor reamed him out for being a DICK leaning on the horn-- the guy scared him so that thereafter he tapped it gently.
Comment from equestrik
I enjoyed this write and also like the Sam Elliot pic. I must admit I like the sarcasm and cynicism as I sometimes am tempted to go there but rarely allow it any more!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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I enjoyed this write and also like the Sam Elliot pic. I must admit I like the sarcasm and cynicism as I sometimes am tempted to go there but rarely allow it any more!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Hello again! Always a pleasure.
You and I think alike! Thankfully, I had little contact with my ex; he just honked the horn -- held it down! -- until the kids came running. Finally, one day my neighbor reamed him out for being a DICK leaning on the horn-- the guy scared him so that thereafter he tapped it gently. Cheers. LIZ
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Comment from royowen
Yes indeed, the "let us still be friends" is code for, "if we bump into one another, pretend we don't know one another."! You're a little like me, I like calling a spade a spade, however one doesn't get the most favourable response, people prefer a cover. Beautifully written Liz blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Yes indeed, the "let us still be friends" is code for, "if we bump into one another, pretend we don't know one another."! You're a little like me, I like calling a spade a spade, however one doesn't get the most favourable response, people prefer a cover. Beautifully written Liz blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Let's hope that never the twain shall meet! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Rikki66
First are the exes husbands or boyfriends (girlfriends to be PC) To be correct spouses or significant others. When the twain meet after they are parted will it be animosity or cold shoulders.
RikkiLXXlll
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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First are the exes husbands or boyfriends (girlfriends to be PC) To be correct spouses or significant others. When the twain meet after they are parted will it be animosity or cold shoulders.
RikkiLXXlll
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Let's hope that never the twain shall meet! Cheers. LIZ
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Let us hope so.
Rikki
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Liz, detailing the feelings of meeting your ex's and those of them, too. I like all of how you wove 'time' into your story, too. I could feel the uncomfortableness as I read this.
Thanks for sharing,
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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You did a great job, Liz, detailing the feelings of meeting your ex's and those of them, too. I like all of how you wove 'time' into your story, too. I could feel the uncomfortableness as I read this.
Thanks for sharing,
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you Jan--I'm pleased you can feel me squirm! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LisaMay
Another revelation of your personal life that we readers can compare our own with. I have exes in different cities thank goodness, so am not likely to run into them (unfortunately, because there is one i would love to run OVER with a battering ram, thereby not damaging my own car.)
Your turns of phrase are often delicious and poetic.
I did have a slight problem with the paragraph of repetition - had to read it to get the sense of it a few times (para beginning with "Until, with more time, it got worse. " etc.)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Another revelation of your personal life that we readers can compare our own with. I have exes in different cities thank goodness, so am not likely to run into them (unfortunately, because there is one i would love to run OVER with a battering ram, thereby not damaging my own car.)
Your turns of phrase are often delicious and poetic.
I did have a slight problem with the paragraph of repetition - had to read it to get the sense of it a few times (para beginning with "Until, with more time, it got worse. " etc.)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Amusing commentary as usual much appreciated! I replaced the semicolon with a period: ...the more time. The more time... (Hope that helps--when writing, I unwisely yielded to the temptation of the semicolon to emphasize the twist of phrase at the expense of clarity). Cheers. LIZ
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Yep... that punctuation adjustment works better for me.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Once it's over, it's over for me. And I'm at an age where I avoid the issue altogether. Besides, the only women who show me any attention are young enough to be my daughter or granddaughter. I mean, I'm flattered. And they would feel good, and/or look good hanging on my arm. But, at some point they are going to see the remnants of this body's better days, which can't be an asset. Then, I'm going to have to talk to them. Sure we'll have nothing in common. Of course, it isn't likely, but they might prefer the dark as much as me. LOL. Sorry, I just couldn't help myself. Thanks for sharing another fun and entertain post.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Once it's over, it's over for me. And I'm at an age where I avoid the issue altogether. Besides, the only women who show me any attention are young enough to be my daughter or granddaughter. I mean, I'm flattered. And they would feel good, and/or look good hanging on my arm. But, at some point they are going to see the remnants of this body's better days, which can't be an asset. Then, I'm going to have to talk to them. Sure we'll have nothing in common. Of course, it isn't likely, but they might prefer the dark as much as me. LOL. Sorry, I just couldn't help myself. Thanks for sharing another fun and entertain post.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Re providing entertainment--right back at you Ric! Always a pleasure. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from lyenochka
You really are a free verse poet who writes prose. I think I'm getting your humor, too! Now just look at a few of your phrases and see the poetry you wrote:
a 4-4-3 poem or a one-line epigram or tongue-twister:
Better faux friends
than flat-out foes,
I suppose.
I really liked:
Time: that phony faith healer.
Father Time's mindless flock spews
such an insipid chorus of
"rah, rah, rah"--
baa, baa, baa--
about toughing it out
to the other side of
Mount Misery.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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You really are a free verse poet who writes prose. I think I'm getting your humor, too! Now just look at a few of your phrases and see the poetry you wrote:
a 4-4-3 poem or a one-line epigram or tongue-twister:
Better faux friends
than flat-out foes,
I suppose.
I really liked:
Time: that phony faith healer.
Father Time's mindless flock spews
such an insipid chorus of
"rah, rah, rah"--
baa, baa, baa--
about toughing it out
to the other side of
Mount Misery.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Wow, Helen. I am awed by your construing me as a poet of sorts! Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
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Really - join the Free Verse Club ! You're a natural!
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Thank you -- I wasn't aware of such a club!
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Check out all the clubs under the Social menu.
Comment from BethShelby
I can't imagine the possibility of being friends with a ex-husband. I guess when there is kids involved the necessity of seeing him would be tough but unavoidable. Some seem able to accomplish that better than others without the emotional turmoil I would imagine would happen in my case.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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I can't imagine the possibility of being friends with a ex-husband. I guess when there is kids involved the necessity of seeing him would be tough but unavoidable. Some seem able to accomplish that better than others without the emotional turmoil I would imagine would happen in my case.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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You and I think alike! Thankfully, I had little contact with my ex; he just honked the horn -- held it down! -- until the kids came running. Finally, one day my neighbor reamed him out for being a DICK leaning on the horn-- the guy scared him so that thereafter he tapped it gently. Cheers. LIZ