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Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Armor Your Faith Up?"Poetry and Short Stories by George Medina Martinez
5 total reviews
Comment from Benshu-bookgai
A bold stylistic choice to capitalize so many words throughout your work--it definitely sends a message of unease, a la a string of click bait-inducing headlines on social media sites.
a few recommended re-works:
Stanza 1,
"Pandemic Diseases does Not help..." comes across as having a plural disagreement. I'd recommend 'Pandemic Diseases do', 'Pandemic Disease does' or more clearly indicating through punctuation if 'Pandemic Diseases' is the title of something (like a headline) that is the detriment to the boss's smile.
Stanza 2,
"Belief's are". if "Belief's" is a contraction of belief and is, then the are is unnecessary. If it's meant to indicate a plural (e.g. more than one belief), the apostrophe is unnecessary.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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A bold stylistic choice to capitalize so many words throughout your work--it definitely sends a message of unease, a la a string of click bait-inducing headlines on social media sites.
a few recommended re-works:
Stanza 1,
"Pandemic Diseases does Not help..." comes across as having a plural disagreement. I'd recommend 'Pandemic Diseases do', 'Pandemic Disease does' or more clearly indicating through punctuation if 'Pandemic Diseases' is the title of something (like a headline) that is the detriment to the boss's smile.
Stanza 2,
"Belief's are". if "Belief's" is a contraction of belief and is, then the are is unnecessary. If it's meant to indicate a plural (e.g. more than one belief), the apostrophe is unnecessary.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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Thanks for the review and comments.
Comment from BeasPeas
I've been touting the message for ages, they should all be fired--Congress--that is. Two terms only and you are out and have to go back to private citizenry. I think they create this mess themselves to insure they garner as many votes for themselves as possible. We try to keep our faith, but can we? I hope so. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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I've been touting the message for ages, they should all be fired--Congress--that is. Two terms only and you are out and have to go back to private citizenry. I think they create this mess themselves to insure they garner as many votes for themselves as possible. We try to keep our faith, but can we? I hope so. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the Support and Great Review. I also believe two and out is a fair amount of time.
Blessings and Please stay Safe.
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Members of Congress will never vote themselves out of a job.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Indeed, you have projected a right order for practice, mere knowledge is not enough, practice of precautionary measures can help making this world free from CORONAVIRUS or COVID 19, I liked the message portrayed clearly in a true fictional and appealing words; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this; faith is essential and absolute; please send me $21 Member Dollars Gift and load your purchased member dollars as gift on to my account and help me making a Premier Shield Upgraded member I'm under the threat of CORONAVIRUS, as FS is not accepting my huge member dollars I earned by writing reviews; wish your entry win the contest; your entry deserved for a 6-Star but I do not have any to offer.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Indeed, you have projected a right order for practice, mere knowledge is not enough, practice of precautionary measures can help making this world free from CORONAVIRUS or COVID 19, I liked the message portrayed clearly in a true fictional and appealing words; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this; faith is essential and absolute; please send me $21 Member Dollars Gift and load your purchased member dollars as gift on to my account and help me making a Premier Shield Upgraded member I'm under the threat of CORONAVIRUS, as FS is not accepting my huge member dollars I earned by writing reviews; wish your entry win the contest; your entry deserved for a 6-Star but I do not have any to offer.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the Support and Encouragement.
If I do Win I will revisit this request.
I'm Also on Immune System surppresor's with a kidney transplant. Blessings and Prayers
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, that's quite a story:"More InsiderTrading and Senators Retired?
The "Bear" Disappears then thing got Mired,
When Lies and Treachery Invade those Who are Hired!
Armor your Faith Up and Say - "You Are All Fired!"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Wow, that's quite a story:"More InsiderTrading and Senators Retired?
The "Bear" Disappears then thing got Mired,
When Lies and Treachery Invade those Who are Hired!
Armor your Faith Up and Say - "You Are All Fired!"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Kind Compliments. Blessings for your time to read and review this poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some clever near rhymes here and your poem certainly has some truth in it, this virus has managed to silence all of us, let's hope there is a cure soon, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Some clever near rhymes here and your poem certainly has some truth in it, this virus has managed to silence all of us, let's hope there is a cure soon, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the review, disturbing news of delaying quick action, sound plausible these days. Continued Blessings to you.