bedevilled
A 5 7 5 poem3 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous 5-7-5, Bedeviled, has the right set up and seems to find a man with a problem in his relationship. Too much of a good thing must be a bad thing.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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This humorous 5-7-5, Bedeviled, has the right set up and seems to find a man with a problem in his relationship. Too much of a good thing must be a bad thing.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2019
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That's what they say, ha ha. Thanks for the review, cheers
Comment from Supe
You nailed the 5-7-5 syllables to a tee, but I'm not sure if this is funny or not. It sounds a little sad to me. He looks to the heaven and sighs - Maybe my interpretation is not correct. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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You nailed the 5-7-5 syllables to a tee, but I'm not sure if this is funny or not. It sounds a little sad to me. He looks to the heaven and sighs - Maybe my interpretation is not correct. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review. No, you are right, not funny. Haha. I changed it, but honestly...still not funny.
Cheers.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Write a Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt.
You've told a complete story of a marriage gone awry in only 3 lines.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Write a Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt.
You've told a complete story of a marriage gone awry in only 3 lines.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the review, not really funny, someone mentioned, I changed it, but still not funny, sigh. Cheers.