Of Sea, Earth and Sky
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Veil of White"A collection of poems written in 5-7-5 format.
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Comment from Janetsue
This haiku offers a snow theme with a beautiful picture. The middle line of the posting, however, appears forced in order to follow the seven syllable rule. Normally, the line would read: like a bride's veil on her wedding day -- the same can be said of the third line, in that a contraction must be used to meet the syllable requirement. Contractions are not considered to be ideal for haiku just for this reason.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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This haiku offers a snow theme with a beautiful picture. The middle line of the posting, however, appears forced in order to follow the seven syllable rule. Normally, the line would read: like a bride's veil on her wedding day -- the same can be said of the third line, in that a contraction must be used to meet the syllable requirement. Contractions are not considered to be ideal for haiku just for this reason.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the review and the info.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Haiku speaks about veil of snow white that covers the earth like bride's veil on wedding day and thereby cloaking what is there beneath, a temporary sham in Nature; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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This Haiku speaks about veil of snow white that covers the earth like bride's veil on wedding day and thereby cloaking what is there beneath, a temporary sham in Nature; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thank you ever so much for the review! Greatly appreciate the encouraging comments!