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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Late to the Wake"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
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Comment from w.j.debi
Being late or even missing from your own wake seems like the best of ideas to me. Use the time to stay home and find something more fun to do.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Being late or even missing from your own wake seems like the best of ideas to me. Use the time to stay home and find something more fun to do.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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I couldn?t agree more....thanks!
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yeah, they're probably not going to chose someone who doesn't pay the phone bill. Could it be you really didn't want to be chosen? LOL Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Yeah, they're probably not going to chose someone who doesn't pay the phone bill. Could it be you really didn't want to be chosen? LOL Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Ahh thank you..it was fun to create this working outside the lines, so to speak.
Comment from pbomar1115
The story is clever the say the least. By using the selected words, you imagined your funeral. To have the serendipitous choice to go on to glory or stick around and hunt some one is hilarious. Great imagination, JLR.
Phillip
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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The story is clever the say the least. By using the selected words, you imagined your funeral. To have the serendipitous choice to go on to glory or stick around and hunt some one is hilarious. Great imagination, JLR.
Phillip
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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My sincere thank you! It was fun to play with this a bit.
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That's great, JLR.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
That might be one day to postpone quite a while. I pay the phone bill, but will forget to charge my phone for days at a time. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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That might be one day to postpone quite a while. I pay the phone bill, but will forget to charge my phone for days at a time. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you, this was a fun little write. Something, outside my normal comfort zone.
Comment from LisaMay
What an excellent idea to not pay the phone bill. If it is that easy to miss your own funeral, i'm all for confiscating phones right away! I like the novelty of your concept.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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What an excellent idea to not pay the phone bill. If it is that easy to miss your own funeral, i'm all for confiscating phones right away! I like the novelty of your concept.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you! While this writing was outside my comfort zone, I found it fun to develop.
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I think the challenge of a new form or topic stretches creative thinking. I often write about things of which i have no personal knowledge, just to make myself find out about it and try to express the emotion of it, like walking a mile in someone else's shoes.
Comment from robyn corum
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Dear Mystery Writer,
I have to tell you, after 8 years here, I have learned how to predict the ending of almost every story I read. (It gets rather boring, I can promise.) But this was a treat! Even though your title, in essence, gave it away, I never saw this angle coming. Great job!!! Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Dear Mystery Writer,
I have to tell you, after 8 years here, I have learned how to predict the ending of almost every story I read. (It gets rather boring, I can promise.) But this was a treat! Even though your title, in essence, gave it away, I never saw this angle coming. Great job!!! Good luck!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you. This was outside my comfort zone, however, it was fun to create.
Comment from Earl Corp
What a quirky little story. When you write one of these with assigned words it might help to use advanced editor and bold the assigned words to make it easier for reviewers to read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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What a quirky little story. When you write one of these with assigned words it might help to use advanced editor and bold the assigned words to make it easier for reviewers to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Great suggestion! Completed and thank you.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is very interesting and very well thought out. I guess that if it was possible to be at home when your wake was occurring, then, you'd miss it as you've so eloquently stated. You've done a fine job presenting this well written work. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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This is very interesting and very well thought out. I guess that if it was possible to be at home when your wake was occurring, then, you'd miss it as you've so eloquently stated. You've done a fine job presenting this well written work. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you t was fun to create something not so serious.
Comment from Dance4Joy
Great poem!!!!!!! I really thoroughly enjoyed reading this! I love the way it flowed and the context too!!!
You did a Great job!!!!!!
Sorry I don't have more to say, I just really really enjoyed this!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Great poem!!!!!!! I really thoroughly enjoyed reading this! I love the way it flowed and the context too!!!
You did a Great job!!!!!!
Sorry I don't have more to say, I just really really enjoyed this!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you..
Comment from Zala Jam
I enjoyed the read even though it was slightly confusing as you're mixing things of this world with things of the "other" world (e.g. dead people don't need to eat breakfast and they don't use phones so a phone call wouldn't be the most effective way to contact a soul). Also, your register is inconsistent ("rock one's world" is quite an informal idiom whereas "many a month" is a lot more formal) and I think the story would read more smoothly if you stick to a particular style of narrating. I liked the idea, though, so my advice would be to work out these inconsistencies as the story has potential!
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed the read even though it was slightly confusing as you're mixing things of this world with things of the "other" world (e.g. dead people don't need to eat breakfast and they don't use phones so a phone call wouldn't be the most effective way to contact a soul). Also, your register is inconsistent ("rock one's world" is quite an informal idiom whereas "many a month" is a lot more formal) and I think the story would read more smoothly if you stick to a particular style of narrating. I liked the idea, though, so my advice would be to work out these inconsistencies as the story has potential!
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Your comments are given, thank you. I needed to get the work rock into the story as part of the contest rules. The intention was a paradox, as an Irishman, I have actually attended the wake of a person prior to their death. your comments are therefore received in gracious acceptance.
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I didn't realise that was possible, thank you for letting me know!