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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, I happen to catch one of your posts. I am glad I did. This is very well written and I am sure all of humanity could make these confessions. We are all sinners in the eyes of God. Thank you, God for your grace.
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Again, I happen to catch one of your posts. I am glad I did. This is very well written and I am sure all of humanity could make these confessions. We are all sinners in the eyes of God. Thank you, God for your grace.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2020
Comment from pome lover
I have never known what to call you. Do you go by Al?
This fictitious confession seems also to be a prayer of supplication. It seems a most serious plea, which must comprise the non-fiction part, and is most passionate.
It is very meaningful and sincere--beautifully done.
Pome lover
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I have never known what to call you. Do you go by Al?
This fictitious confession seems also to be a prayer of supplication. It seems a most serious plea, which must comprise the non-fiction part, and is most passionate.
It is very meaningful and sincere--beautifully done.
Pome lover
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
This got me very emotional. I could feel your voice in my head whilst reading this. This is indeed a humble supplication from the depth of one's soul. You have indeed written well.
Some quick suggestions: many of your sentences are very long, run-on sentences. You may just want to break them into where appropriate. In: "You see what I do from the core of my heart and from my little brain in and around back part of my head." Adding "the" to the above sentence, so that it reads "the back" would make the sentence clearer to the reader.
Again. in statements such as "facts that," "facts as to or facts about" would better replacements.
You may want to consider adding a coma after "of" in "of and how much truths I have distorted, refused and denied of, and how many promises I have refused and failed to keep."
Furthermore, In: "Please grant my prayer with appeal following my true confession first ever, and accord to my favour at par with your exclusive power and grace me with a physical change in my body to make me a dumb man." You may want to add a comma after "confession" and "power."
Just read through the work again, add commas where appropriate, break very long sentences into two and you'd be good to go. A very interesting read! My best wishes!
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This got me very emotional. I could feel your voice in my head whilst reading this. This is indeed a humble supplication from the depth of one's soul. You have indeed written well.
Some quick suggestions: many of your sentences are very long, run-on sentences. You may just want to break them into where appropriate. In: "You see what I do from the core of my heart and from my little brain in and around back part of my head." Adding "the" to the above sentence, so that it reads "the back" would make the sentence clearer to the reader.
Again. in statements such as "facts that," "facts as to or facts about" would better replacements.
You may want to consider adding a coma after "of" in "of and how much truths I have distorted, refused and denied of, and how many promises I have refused and failed to keep."
Furthermore, In: "Please grant my prayer with appeal following my true confession first ever, and accord to my favour at par with your exclusive power and grace me with a physical change in my body to make me a dumb man." You may want to add a comma after "confession" and "power."
Just read through the work again, add commas where appropriate, break very long sentences into two and you'd be good to go. A very interesting read! My best wishes!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
A tour de force of self-deprecation! So clever and witty. Love the over-the-top barrage of offenses. You've covered all the bases and then some. I relished the reading! Cheers. LIZ
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A tour de force of self-deprecation! So clever and witty. Love the over-the-top barrage of offenses. You've covered all the bases and then some. I relished the reading! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I agree that we are to talk to God about everything. However, no matter how flowery our words are, no matter how long winded we are, no matter how much we repeat, God is not mindful of it for He knows the heart and thoughts of man. Men can say anything, and people can think it true and good, but God will beg to differ. His decision tops everything.
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I agree that we are to talk to God about everything. However, no matter how flowery our words are, no matter how long winded we are, no matter how much we repeat, God is not mindful of it for He knows the heart and thoughts of man. Men can say anything, and people can think it true and good, but God will beg to differ. His decision tops everything.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
In the light of Author Note, it's a nice piece of Spiritual Non-Fiction having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the dark side of human beings in this world.
Although after a long time, yet as usual MARVELOUS Presentation!
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear,
In the light of Author Note, it's a nice piece of Spiritual Non-Fiction having impressive phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the dark side of human beings in this world.
Although after a long time, yet as usual MARVELOUS Presentation!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from royowen
A pleasure to read such a humble work my friend. Not all posts are so self effacing as this one, so well done, it's definitely good to pleasing before God. Beautifully written my friend, you are a good man, blessings Roy,
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A pleasure to read such a humble work my friend. Not all posts are so self effacing as this one, so well done, it's definitely good to pleasing before God. Beautifully written my friend, you are a good man, blessings Roy,
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Shirley McLain
Oh Wow, What a wonderful confessional prayer that could be applied to any of us. You did an excellent job and I didn't find one mistake. Take care and stay healthy. Shirley
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Oh Wow, What a wonderful confessional prayer that could be applied to any of us. You did an excellent job and I didn't find one mistake. Take care and stay healthy. Shirley
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I don;t want to confess, but here I am pouring my soul live:) nicely done, and you have not forgot to mention any of the main capital sins. Thank you for sharing, good luck with your writings and please stay safe.
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I don;t want to confess, but here I am pouring my soul live:) nicely done, and you have not forgot to mention any of the main capital sins. Thank you for sharing, good luck with your writings and please stay safe.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from RShipp
"As you are aware of the facts of how many foul lectures I have delivered" ... I wonder if my 'favorite professor' ever felt these words?
"You know the facts that how many lies I have told in chit-chats, gossips, small talks, rumours, idle talks.." If everyone did that at confessional, there would be a long line.
Enjoyed!
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"As you are aware of the facts of how many foul lectures I have delivered" ... I wonder if my 'favorite professor' ever felt these words?
"You know the facts that how many lies I have told in chit-chats, gossips, small talks, rumours, idle talks.." If everyone did that at confessional, there would be a long line.
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020