Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This certainly meets the contest requirements as you deliver a piece filled with concrete and fluid end rhyme, even if it is just three lines. I applaud you for bravery as to enter a minimal syllable verse against all of the mighty epics submitted inspires thoughts of David and Goliath in me LOL. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019

Ms. Angel!

I can only write short ones. Epic length ones are not in my poetry wheelhouse.

Pleased you liked it anyway for the contest.

Mark

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well, you got that 100% right, Mark. Love the rhyme, the art choice, and the overall message. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019

Glad you liked my short verse Jan.

Likely my competition in this contest will have much longer ones (-:

Mark

Comment from Janetsue

Excellent

This is a unique posting coupled with a very cool picture. The triple rhyme is excellent and easily understood. I can't even remember when I last drank champagne, but the effects are well-understood when over-indulgence is happening. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019

Thanks Spangle for your sparkling review for my rhymed contest entry. My eclectic 5-7-5 writing style occasionally tries for rhymes or alliterations. Sometimes, I even achieve both in the same (-;

My bucket list e-book publication combined a picture book with alliterations for each letter of the alphabet.

We should always drink in moderation. LOL

Mark

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

Cool picture you chose to accompany your poem. Since I prefer rhyming poems yto free verse, yours is great. The only question I have is: why so shory? Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

Earl.

Thanks again for your review.

17 syllables seem to be my poetry limit LOL

I doubt in my next life that I will gravitate to longer poems.

Mark

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

When you care to drink champagne doubles, you find troubles, bubbles in champagne create troubles; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

THANKS DR!

Agreed about too many!

Mark

Comment from Kat Kline

Excellent

A whimsical way of sharing what I would call a universal truth. I personally struggle with 5-7-5 because I feel like I don't have enough space to be unique or personal, but I think you've done that. This is going to be stuck in my head all day. Well done!

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

Kat,

Funny, 5-7-5 is my favorite poetry mode/style. I find I am unable to compose in a longer verse style. Thanks for saying that I was able to be unique and personal in my syllable-limited way. Your comments are appreciated!

Mark

P.S. Maybe a nice glass of wine as a nite cap will get this out of your head. LOL

reply by Kat Kline on 18-Jun-2019

Hehe I think it doesn't work for me because I just like the sound of my own voice (...look of my own words???)

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

You are the funny rhyming man today, sir -- an enjoyable read that perhaps whispers of things best left in the past... :) Thanx for sharing. :) Yvette

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2019

Yvette,

One glass of champagne is enough to toast your review for my post today. I doubt you or me want to be drunk on success. LOL

Mark