Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Lazarus the Autopilot"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
5 total reviews
Comment from Halfree
One and two member cents... sort of a put down for this poem...has a lot more value than what is rewarded. But then I do not think you write for just stars and such. Very enjoyable,and to me, that's all that is required. Keep plugging away...think you have talent,
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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One and two member cents... sort of a put down for this poem...has a lot more value than what is rewarded. But then I do not think you write for just stars and such. Very enjoyable,and to me, that's all that is required. Keep plugging away...think you have talent,
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Halfree. I'm glad you liked it. Coming from you, 5 stars means something.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a witty and well written poem. Yes, sometimes mechanics can be like Gods. And most beer drinkers I know feel the same as you do about PBR.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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This is a witty and well written poem. Yes, sometimes mechanics can be like Gods. And most beer drinkers I know feel the same as you do about PBR.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 01-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2019
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LOL! I'm so glad i'm not the only one! (re: PBR) I get flack for liking Rolling Rock and Miller High Life too though. I'm glad you liked the poem. It was cathartic.
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Well before I was diagnosed with Celiac Disease and realized I was allergic to the malt in beer, I was a Michelob or Sam Adams drinker.
You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from susand3022
Awww, sweetie... was your baby hating life? I do hope it's feeling better now! :) What a cute poem. I have to admit that I totally didn't get it at all until I read the Author's notes. Thank God for Author's notes!!! LOL I hope your baby stays well throughout the summer months... smooth sailing! :)
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Awww, sweetie... was your baby hating life? I do hope it's feeling better now! :) What a cute poem. I have to admit that I totally didn't get it at all until I read the Author's notes. Thank God for Author's notes!!! LOL I hope your baby stays well throughout the summer months... smooth sailing! :)
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Yeah, last year, my autopilot wasn't working. I brought it to Deano, and he used a voltage converter to test it. Then later he went to my boat and rewired the outlet. Only charged me $40. Or maybe that was my stern light. Maybe I only paid him in PBR that time. LOL!
Comment from James W. Reynolds
I like the creativity here - how the act of repairing something is the equivalent of a miracle, which at times I guess it is. The ritual is somewhat humorous, but mostly serious. I have no suggestions for improvement.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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I like the creativity here - how the act of repairing something is the equivalent of a miracle, which at times I guess it is. The ritual is somewhat humorous, but mostly serious. I have no suggestions for improvement.
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you, James.
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The ironic thing is he is a devout atheist.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Nice use of religious imagery (with a lighter than usual touch) in this story of the miracle-worker who brings failing boat items back to life - hence the Lazarus in the title.
You may want to add notes for us poor non-sailing people. I have no idea what Coosa board is, although there may be a reference to fibreglass work. Even PBR and Irish Death have me puzzled although the context gives alcoholic drinks as the likely meaning.
Steve
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Nice use of religious imagery (with a lighter than usual touch) in this story of the miracle-worker who brings failing boat items back to life - hence the Lazarus in the title.
You may want to add notes for us poor non-sailing people. I have no idea what Coosa board is, although there may be a reference to fibreglass work. Even PBR and Irish Death have me puzzled although the context gives alcoholic drinks as the likely meaning.
Steve
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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LOL! Good point. I'll put a dictionary at the end.