Reviews from

Chip's Poetry

Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Beach Time"
FanStory Collection

25 total reviews 
Comment from moongirlwriter
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Daughters are a special gift and watching them experience the ocean for the first time is pretty amazing. Love the artwork with this little 2-4-6.
Congrats. on the award.

 Comment Written 27-May-2019


reply by the author on 28-May-2019
    Thanks, moongirl!
reply by moongirlwriter on 30-May-2019
    :)
Comment from robyn corum
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Dear Mystery Writer,

Isn't it amazing to watch their faces while they experience new things? In June, my husband's whole family (pretty much) will be heading to the beach (and staying in the same house -egads!) for a week.

My two granddaughters will be having a BALL!!! I think this is such a fun entry for the contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 25-May-2019


reply by the author on 26-May-2019
    Thanks, Robyn, it was fun to write!
Comment from Richard J
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Aw,
Now, this is precious and the picture just grabs the heart and makes it smile. I'll bet the daughter loves her father more than the water.
With great imagery and a beautiful moment captured, you should do quite well in the contest with the spot-on rhymes and eye-candy presentation.

Many thank you's for sharing this sunny piece of poetic crafting! ~ Richard : )

 Comment Written 25-May-2019


reply by the author on 26-May-2019
    Thank you, Richard!
Comment from Bill Schott
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This 2-4-6, Beach Time, has the right set up and finds the father/daughter bond to be as strong at the beach as at home. Nice.

 Comment Written 25-May-2019


reply by the author on 26-May-2019
    Thank you, Bill.
Comment from MsPetra
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I smiled. This is so short, but I loved it.
It seems like a great beginning only because I wish there were more.
For what it is I wouldn't have done anything differently. Please keep writing.

 Comment Written 25-May-2019


reply by the author on 26-May-2019
    Thanks, Petra!
Comment from jenintorre
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I love this. You have my vote. It is such clever rhyme and my kind of 2-4-6 poetry. Very well chosen artwork. Good luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 25-May-2019


reply by the author on 26-May-2019
    Thanks for the kind words and generous rating, Jen!
Comment from Rmocruz
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I find this to be clever rhyming in brevity.
The photo-art selection reinforces your words perfectly.
Looks like a competitive 2-4-6 writing prompt entry.
Best wishes!

 Comment Written 24-May-2019


reply by the author on 24-May-2019
    Thank you.
reply by Rmocruz on 24-May-2019
    You're welcome.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Great job with your mono-rhyming, mystery writer. Terrific picture that complements your poem! Happiness oozes from both picture and poem. Syllable count for each line is spot on. Best wishes for the contest with this great entry.

Connie

 Comment Written 24-May-2019


reply by the author on 24-May-2019
    Thanks, Connie.
Comment from TPAC
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I felt this same thrill my first visit to beach, given age twelve, not missing my swims in creeks with snakes. I do miss stone points where water flow over them. All stated in my opinion.

 Comment Written 24-May-2019


reply by the author on 24-May-2019
    Thanks, TPAC.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

You have made great use of all your syllables in this uplifting, exuberant
piece about the importance of pleasing those we love. Making others happy makes us happy--should make us happy.

 Comment Written 23-May-2019


reply by the author on 23-May-2019
    Thanks.