Pulling Up The Drawbridge
(Withdrawing from love's battles)10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This story poem, Pulling Up the Drawbridge, using the medieval castle references, leaves the reader with the idea that there is a true desire to be left alone. I used to use the spelling difference between America and the rest of the English writing world to catch essayists in the classroom who found cutting and pasting work from the internet as a good way to preserve their social networking time. A few indefensible spellings of 'neighbour' and 'realising' found them out as plagiarists.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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This story poem, Pulling Up the Drawbridge, using the medieval castle references, leaves the reader with the idea that there is a true desire to be left alone. I used to use the spelling difference between America and the rest of the English writing world to catch essayists in the classroom who found cutting and pasting work from the internet as a good way to preserve their social networking time. A few indefensible spellings of 'neighbour' and 'realising' found them out as plagiarists.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Yes, spelling differences are very useful as a plagiarism trap. If students are too lazy to write their own assignments, then they would definitely be too lazy to learn to spell properly in their own country's version of English. Thanks for your review. I liked hearing about your classroom days.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Very well-written poem with a story. I like how you presented your idea of defending yourself against a broken heart after a serious loss. That is one of the toughest parts of life. Thanks for sharing this in a creative way. I like the metaphor you chose.
Bill
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Very well-written poem with a story. I like how you presented your idea of defending yourself against a broken heart after a serious loss. That is one of the toughest parts of life. Thanks for sharing this in a creative way. I like the metaphor you chose.
Bill
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thanks for this supportive and complimentary review Bill.
Comment from Kamisah Karim
Good story telling here.Don't worry about spelling as well.I have the same problem in my country.We abide to the UK English spelling but we watch a lot of American movies. We tend to switch from UK to the American spelling.Accepted both.
The poem depicts a broken heart very well.A door closed forever because the heart was given fully and eventhough the other had long been gone, it remained with the betrayer.Matters of the heart are very complicated. Falling in love is not something we can control actually.We can only deny it but the heart decides.Be very careful not to get caught of guard.Nothing is more difficult than trying to heal a broken heart.Regardless, what type of love.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Good story telling here.Don't worry about spelling as well.I have the same problem in my country.We abide to the UK English spelling but we watch a lot of American movies. We tend to switch from UK to the American spelling.Accepted both.
The poem depicts a broken heart very well.A door closed forever because the heart was given fully and eventhough the other had long been gone, it remained with the betrayer.Matters of the heart are very complicated. Falling in love is not something we can control actually.We can only deny it but the heart decides.Be very careful not to get caught of guard.Nothing is more difficult than trying to heal a broken heart.Regardless, what type of love.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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I appreciate your insightful review. The heart does indeed decide, but it is a shame to shut ourselves away from other opportunities to get over bad experiences.
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Yes, that's very true but there are people who would rather be safe than sorry.Once bitten twice shy.Hopefully, they can summon enough courage to try again.
This time, presenting a wiser person, more experienced.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a very well-written poem with a well-sustained metaphor of the "castle of solitude." Despite the heraldic metaphor, the poem is very relatable, as there are few who have never had to construct "deep moats" and "high walls" to protect their own emotions. I respect the heroine's decision that she doesn't actually need the knight to give her peace and happiness. She can, in fact, be fine on her own (with the royal cat for company, of course).
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This is a very well-written poem with a well-sustained metaphor of the "castle of solitude." Despite the heraldic metaphor, the poem is very relatable, as there are few who have never had to construct "deep moats" and "high walls" to protect their own emotions. I respect the heroine's decision that she doesn't actually need the knight to give her peace and happiness. She can, in fact, be fine on her own (with the royal cat for company, of course).
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Aah, but the cat has fish-breath, the castle walls have rising damp and mould, the moat is stagnant and smells.... she needs to get out more. She can be resilient in company surely, having learned that she doesn't need a man for fulfilment.
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Of course, the knight could have fish breath and, in that suit of armor, he probably smells too. Perhaps she can be resilient in company but, with the fish-breath cat and the stinky knight, solitude is sounding better and better - or at least a lot less smelly.
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Sad but true. Who needs a smelly man. Even clean ones can be useless.
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It depends on the man. I managed to find one who's both useful and odor-free. I guess I've hit the jackpot!
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Lucky you indeed!
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I suspect there are a few more useful, odor-free men and women out there just ripe for the picking. :-)
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...or the plucking
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Maybe that's the problem. You're pursuing ducks and chickens instead of people. Of course, if you're talking about plucking people, I'll be rather worried. ;-)
Comment from poetwatch
The pain and the anger some people cannot forget, but love whether it be by chance is always better to kiss that a cat. :) I'm a dog lover. ;) Every man in a suit of armor does not shine, many will gather rust. This is a good entry for the Story Poem contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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The pain and the anger some people cannot forget, but love whether it be by chance is always better to kiss that a cat. :) I'm a dog lover. ;) Every man in a suit of armor does not shine, many will gather rust. This is a good entry for the Story Poem contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Yes, I agree. That cat has fish-breath. A dog is probably even more sympathetic company than a cat, but you are right... we should not shut ourselves off to love. She needs to get out of her castle more. Take her cat for a walk.
Comment from L. A. Stanley
This is a great poem about being hurt time and time again, until finally choosing to remain "sane" by being on your own with those you love (your cats). I like the ending part, too, about your knight would have to cast a spell to get you out of your castle. I did notice the different spellings--the word offence caught my attention first. I didn't think it was an error, I thought maybe it was from English derivation and thought maybe you were English. Very well written, and creative!
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This is a great poem about being hurt time and time again, until finally choosing to remain "sane" by being on your own with those you love (your cats). I like the ending part, too, about your knight would have to cast a spell to get you out of your castle. I did notice the different spellings--the word offence caught my attention first. I didn't think it was an error, I thought maybe it was from English derivation and thought maybe you were English. Very well written, and creative!
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Shutting oneself away can have its merits but also one can miss out on things.
I thought I needed to explain that spelling difference and then the background seemed interesting enough to share. I live in NZ.
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Welcome friend! I?m in the USA. Good to connect and help each other out.
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Nice to meet you. I see that you are new to this site. Welcome, and I hope you enjoy the connections and writing encouragement. I have belonged for 4 months and feel that my writing is improving through reading and reviewing and trying to post my work regularly.
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Glad to be here. Your work us good!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This story poem is a imagined and innovated story about withdrawing from love's battle, a frame of mind of a drawbridge purposively used for self-defence and setting yourself free; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Write to inspire changes for years--DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This story poem is a imagined and innovated story about withdrawing from love's battle, a frame of mind of a drawbridge purposively used for self-defence and setting yourself free; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Write to inspire changes for years--DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Yes, we can free ourselves from worry, but then we get locked up into something else.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Sara R.
Love is the one thing we never should give up on, people yes, they disappoint, but love is beautiful. Maybe it was shared with the wrong person. You expressed what many people can relate to. So many broken hearts that never mend due to one love break. Love lives forever.
Sara R.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Love is the one thing we never should give up on, people yes, they disappoint, but love is beautiful. Maybe it was shared with the wrong person. You expressed what many people can relate to. So many broken hearts that never mend due to one love break. Love lives forever.
Sara R.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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I agree entirely. Long live love. Love conquers all. This woman loved and lost. She doesn't sound too bitter; let's hope that knight with the spell will turn up soon. I hope he likes cats.
Comment from moongirlwriter
very cute, the reversal of a fairy tale, so to speak. There are some days I feel like that. . .just me and my cat. I just don't have the castle. :) The best of luck in the contest. It's a fun read.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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very cute, the reversal of a fairy tale, so to speak. There are some days I feel like that. . .just me and my cat. I just don't have the castle. :) The best of luck in the contest. It's a fun read.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Maybe it's lucky we don't have castles and ivory towers; we have to be out in the real world where love is possible again. With a spell-binding untarnished knight who likes cats.
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definitely someone who loves cats. :)
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow, way too much defensive author notes about how to spell defence. If they don't get it, screw them. Lol. Excellent piece for this contest. I was giving thought to this contest but I'm too tired and drunk to care, sooooo...... I wish you the best of luck in the booth. I'll keep an eye out for it tomorrow. Great write.
DS
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Wow, way too much defensive author notes about how to spell defence. If they don't get it, screw them. Lol. Excellent piece for this contest. I was giving thought to this contest but I'm too tired and drunk to care, sooooo...... I wish you the best of luck in the booth. I'll keep an eye out for it tomorrow. Great write.
DS
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Yes, those notes are a bit long-winded but I thought the history was rather interesting. Thanks for reviewing.