Age Of Overload
You can run on your treadmill, but you can't hide.9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
Well done writing about the age of overload, from instant messages to unlimited and overused texting to news stories you can't trust To well-designed images designed to hide what's really beneath the surface.
Very well done then good luck in the contest.
Bill
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Well done writing about the age of overload, from instant messages to unlimited and overused texting to news stories you can't trust To well-designed images designed to hide what's really beneath the surface.
Very well done then good luck in the contest.
Bill
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much Bill for seeing the ideas in this poem.
Comment from poetwatch
Why did you do it? Do you not understand that poets love to unravel the words from a friend. My mind is befuddled by the words that you wrote. I see where you are coming from and Mother Nature agrees with you. We are destroying what we have and trying to go to where and what we don't have. :) Good entry for the ? writing contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Why did you do it? Do you not understand that poets love to unravel the words from a friend. My mind is befuddled by the words that you wrote. I see where you are coming from and Mother Nature agrees with you. We are destroying what we have and trying to go to where and what we don't have. :) Good entry for the ? writing contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review. 'Befuddled' is a great word to describe how modern life can make me feel, observing how some folks run around in so many directions and never get anywhere or do anything productive. But hey, they might get famous for 15 seconds (it used to be 15 minutes.)
Comment from 24chas
What a write. I was exhausted after I finished reading it. Your author notes were correct with the overloaded feeling I had upon completion. Good job of writing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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What a write. I was exhausted after I finished reading it. Your author notes were correct with the overloaded feeling I had upon completion. Good job of writing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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I appreciate your review. Exhausted, befuddled, overwhelmed... just another day of being exposed to too much drivel; so hard to pick out what is worth holding onto... finding those gemstones looks like we have to get our hands dirty.
Comment from Beri Bee
I appreciate the disturbing imagery and questioning of the dark side of humanity. Thank you for sharing this. It almost seems like several poems in one.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I appreciate the disturbing imagery and questioning of the dark side of humanity. Thank you for sharing this. It almost seems like several poems in one.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review, in which you recognise my disturbed intent. It may well be a pastiche of poems... I did not know when to stop!
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Thank you! Again, I think it's excellent!
Comment from Rmocruz
You have well conformed to this question writing prompt.
I have one question. Why the fuck are we unable to do
anything about it? You have expressed it all here in well
written rhyme. Colorful imagery presents dark metaphors,
mankind, blind, distracted; at its worst.
A dark and powerful, exceptional writing.
This contest you should be awarded, my
pleasure to have read.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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You have well conformed to this question writing prompt.
I have one question. Why the fuck are we unable to do
anything about it? You have expressed it all here in well
written rhyme. Colorful imagery presents dark metaphors,
mankind, blind, distracted; at its worst.
A dark and powerful, exceptional writing.
This contest you should be awarded, my
pleasure to have read.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Only the one question?
Thanks for ploughing through the mire with me.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Michele Harber
You state that your goal is to make the reader feel "overloaded and beaten down," and you accomplish that both visually, through the layout and picture, and through your words. The poem is dark and gloomy, and wordy in a way that promotes the feeling of oppression and, almost, claustrophobia. Perhaps parts of the poem are confusing, as you suggest, but what comes through loud and clear is that our world is a mess, and has gotten this way at the hand of humankind. Of course you followed the rule of beginning each stanza with a question, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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You state that your goal is to make the reader feel "overloaded and beaten down," and you accomplish that both visually, through the layout and picture, and through your words. The poem is dark and gloomy, and wordy in a way that promotes the feeling of oppression and, almost, claustrophobia. Perhaps parts of the poem are confusing, as you suggest, but what comes through loud and clear is that our world is a mess, and has gotten this way at the hand of humankind. Of course you followed the rule of beginning each stanza with a question, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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You gave me the word I was trying to capture in my poem: claustrophobia. Thanks. It's that feeling I get when I watch the news. Seems like I turn it off before anything uplifting comes on. There must be some good news somewhere. I am a happy, well adjusted person with an interesting life, but I just want to hide away from all this crap we get subjected to.
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I understand totally. National news is almost always negative, but local news often tries to find that one uplifting local story that can help make you realize that there is still some good in the world.
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I'll change channels then.
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:-)
Comment from beizanten
A very good opening stanza. A well written second stanza. a very good and interesting third stanza. A very well written fourth and fifth stanza. Overall you have written a great poem
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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A very good opening stanza. A well written second stanza. a very good and interesting third stanza. A very well written fourth and fifth stanza. Overall you have written a great poem
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks for your review. I'm glad you found it interesting.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks questions, commenting about our living in the age of overload, media's and leaders roles and governance; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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This speaks questions, commenting about our living in the age of overload, media's and leaders roles and governance; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Exactly. We've probably all had a gutsfull.
Thanks for your review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Man leaves much waste in this world and it is a huge problem. Recycling is something the British are hot on and there is a fine if you are caught not recycling and putting plastic bottles into normal rubbish, I think this is what your poem is about, well said, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Man leaves much waste in this world and it is a huge problem. Recycling is something the British are hot on and there is a fine if you are caught not recycling and putting plastic bottles into normal rubbish, I think this is what your poem is about, well said, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I approve of the Brits system. Waste will overwhelm us otherwise... it already is in some places.