Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Roxanna.
Wow! You are so close to the end and the writing is still action packed and retains much interest.
The battle scenes are graphic and appear to be well researched.
Well done.
Shirley

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019

Thank you dear. Rox

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Roxanna, it's such a sad chapter, but the end promised new hope. I'm not into fantasy stories let alone dragons, but I have to say it's very well written, so here you have me following along. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thanks so much. It's not for everyone. I'm almost done. =} Have a great day. Rox

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

Another imaginative episode and you are keeping the reader's interest.

I picked up a few small points:
He grabbed Lyse hand and they ran into the woods - apostrophe after Lyse - either Lyse' hand or Lyse's hand.

Dyster's iridescent scales shown in the fading light - should be 'shone'.

His chest wound still bleed - still bled

He lost conscientiousness - should be 'consciousness'

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thank you and for the helps. Rox =}

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This is an interesting development in the story, I thought Lucas might be mortally wounded, but he's now allied to Ond-Natt's father, a formidable ally indeed, how will they fare? Well done Rox, blessings, Roy
Typo : His scales (shown) silver in the light. Shone? 2: he grabbed Lyse('s) hand. 3: Dyster's iridescent scales (shown) shone? 4: his chest wound still
(Bleed) bled?

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thank you Roy and for the corrections as well. Fixed them, =] Rox

reply by royowen on 17-Apr-2019

My pleasure

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

"avenges his son" should be "avenge his son". A well crafted man versus monster story. Battles take their tolls on everyone in many different ways. Interesting read.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thank you, yes I saw I had put the wrong word in the description. Fixed it. Thanks again. Rox

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Ended too soon. More, please. Excellent reading. I didn't see one thing to recommend to you. Lots of tension and action and I want to find out what happens next. Great job. Shirley

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thanks so much Shirley.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Dyster is his son too. He will know that when he see's that Dyster has the blue coloring, Where else would he get the Blue scales? I have a feeling he may not fight Dyster. I may be wrong but I can dream can't I? LOL Nancy:)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

You'll have to wait and see. =} Thanks so much Nancy. Rox

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is not good news! I hope Joshua and all the others who have taken off after him are a match for the two large dragons and Lucas. Evil is always the stronger when it comes down to a battle. But, brains can outmatch them sometimes, let's hope this is one of those times. This is another brilliant part, Rox, well done! :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019

Thanks so much dear. Almost to the end. =} Rox