Perennials of War
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Comment from Margie Nairn
This is a story as old as time where a woman must choose between her father and her love interest. Beautifully written with strong dialogue. I was disappointed that Drew seemed to give up so easily and also that Shana let her father take control of her life. I'm hoping one or the other will see the light!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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This is a story as old as time where a woman must choose between her father and her love interest. Beautifully written with strong dialogue. I was disappointed that Drew seemed to give up so easily and also that Shana let her father take control of her life. I'm hoping one or the other will see the light!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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The next post tells all. Drew didn't give in easily. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I cannot wait until next week to find out who Shana chooses, or if she still must make a choice.
This is such a beautiful story you've told :) You are so very gifted!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings,
Gale
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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I cannot wait until next week to find out who Shana chooses, or if she still must make a choice.
This is such a beautiful story you've told :) You are so very gifted!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings,
Gale
Comment Written 23-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from called2rite
I like the emotional high and indecisiveness of what to do in this chapter. Makes me wonder what the previous chapters were and go back and read them. Since I don't know the previous scene, I can't review the flowing of one chapter to the next, etc. However, I did see that crime, justice, and action had taken place previously. The conflict needed in good fiction is there. Just curious, for my own writing, how long is your book?
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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I like the emotional high and indecisiveness of what to do in this chapter. Makes me wonder what the previous chapters were and go back and read them. Since I don't know the previous scene, I can't review the flowing of one chapter to the next, etc. However, I did see that crime, justice, and action had taken place previously. The conflict needed in good fiction is there. Just curious, for my own writing, how long is your book?
Comment Written 23-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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The total novel is about 89,000 words. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thanks for answering the word count.
Comment from diamondbogle
I enjoyed it. I thought it had nice flow and you do a really good job of going from dialog to story. Overall I thought it was really good. I quickly picked up on the story and it was easy to read.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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I enjoyed it. I thought it had nice flow and you do a really good job of going from dialog to story. Overall I thought it was really good. I quickly picked up on the story and it was easy to read.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
A funny side story to this is, God won't have a special place for Jews, and a special place for Christian Gentiles, they are both God's people, rejecting Christ, means rejecting God, so believing Jews and Gentiles alike will worship in the same place, that's what Peter discovered, when God lowered the sheet of kosher and non kosher foods and other things down from Heaven, I think if Benjamin truly loves his daughter, he will want her to be happy, as I care for my daughters and want them to be happy. Bless you Barbata, a great backstory to this. Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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A funny side story to this is, God won't have a special place for Jews, and a special place for Christian Gentiles, they are both God's people, rejecting Christ, means rejecting God, so believing Jews and Gentiles alike will worship in the same place, that's what Peter discovered, when God lowered the sheet of kosher and non kosher foods and other things down from Heaven, I think if Benjamin truly loves his daughter, he will want her to be happy, as I care for my daughters and want them to be happy. Bless you Barbata, a great backstory to this. Roy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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There is a huge backstory to this. I hope it comes through in the end. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, I agree with you, it deserves to do well.
Comment from BigPoppaJrock
A very well written piece that allows the reader to invest emotionally into the story. A nice simple flow from paragraph to paragraph and easy to follow through your character interactions. Family vs. true love, very intriguing and never ending societal dilemma. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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A very well written piece that allows the reader to invest emotionally into the story. A nice simple flow from paragraph to paragraph and easy to follow through your character interactions. Family vs. true love, very intriguing and never ending societal dilemma. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. With danger no longer a concern, Shana and Drew appear to be an emotional and philosophical crossroad. Shana loves Drew, but the power her father wields over her life seems too much for their love for one another to overcome. Will Shana be able to live her life or one her father wants her to?
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. With danger no longer a concern, Shana and Drew appear to be an emotional and philosophical crossroad. Shana loves Drew, but the power her father wields over her life seems too much for their love for one another to overcome. Will Shana be able to live her life or one her father wants her to?
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TheStoryMan
This is a well written chapter. There were no spelling or grammar errors and no typos. You didn't leave in any extra words or leave any out. This is a really good story.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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This is a well written chapter. There were no spelling or grammar errors and no typos. You didn't leave in any extra words or leave any out. This is a really good story.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I tend to leave the little words out.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and a very emotional one. So Shana is going home, and Drew seems to conform with fact. Well, all I can say is that I hope she will stand up to her Dad. But that is still to be seen. She's a victim to her rekigion. Can he not see that her children will always be Jewish as she carries the line. Ach well, I get carried away. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and a very emotional one. So Shana is going home, and Drew seems to conform with fact. Well, all I can say is that I hope she will stand up to her Dad. But that is still to be seen. She's a victim to her rekigion. Can he not see that her children will always be Jewish as she carries the line. Ach well, I get carried away. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I agree. It will interesting to see what happens next, I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from SLMorrical
Such a sad chapter. I understand keeping within your heritage, but this is just to hard for Shana. I hope Drew finds a way for them to be together. I was glued to see why Shana was crying and how she interacted with her father. I related with Shana and the hardship of choosing, and they shouldn't make her choose. I look forward to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Such a sad chapter. I understand keeping within your heritage, but this is just to hard for Shana. I hope Drew finds a way for them to be together. I was glued to see why Shana was crying and how she interacted with her father. I related with Shana and the hardship of choosing, and they shouldn't make her choose. I look forward to see what happens next.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Drew was compassionate and gave in. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes Drew was compassionate and gave in, but still that makes it harder on both him and Shana. I do hope he finds a way they can be together.