Of Sea, Earth and Sky
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Wingless Pegasus"A collection of poems written in 5-7-5 format.
4 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I remember watching a movie on just that subject of motion pictures. This is a very well done haiku with the descriptive lines connected and then the AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH line. Sorry, sorta over did that one
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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I remember watching a movie on just that subject of motion pictures. This is a very well done haiku with the descriptive lines connected and then the AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH line. Sorry, sorta over did that one
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Thanks for all the wonderful stars and the more than kind review! No apologies needed.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an excellent haiku, mainly because of the expression 'airborne hooves' which is an ideal satori line as it is so unexpected. The British airborne forces in WW2 had Pegasus as their emblem, shoulder flash. When you come to think of it, having all four feet of the ground in a gallop is not so strange, the definition of human 'running' is that both feet should at some stage lose contact with the ground. Race walkers get disqualified if it happens to them, as the definition of walking is that one foot at least must be in contact with the ground.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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This is an excellent haiku, mainly because of the expression 'airborne hooves' which is an ideal satori line as it is so unexpected. The British airborne forces in WW2 had Pegasus as their emblem, shoulder flash. When you come to think of it, having all four feet of the ground in a gallop is not so strange, the definition of human 'running' is that both feet should at some stage lose contact with the ground. Race walkers get disqualified if it happens to them, as the definition of walking is that one foot at least must be in contact with the ground.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you. I very much appreciate the wonderful stars and the information you included in your review.
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Cool. I like the idea of comparing a race horse to Pegasus. My father used to take me to a horse-racing track in CA when I was young. He taught me to read a racing form, and I gave a book report on how to do this in an elementary school class.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Cool. I like the idea of comparing a race horse to Pegasus. My father used to take me to a horse-racing track in CA when I was young. He taught me to read a racing form, and I gave a book report on how to do this in an elementary school class.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you so very much for the wonder stars and the review!
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Visually impressive. Creative Haiku, interesting observation. The words are well chosen to convey the message. Your notes were helpful to understand it.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Visually impressive. Creative Haiku, interesting observation. The words are well chosen to convey the message. Your notes were helpful to understand it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I thank you for the wonderful stars and the review.Not sure if everyone who read this poem would know this fact, so I thought a little explanation might help.