Dreams of Reality
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Tempest"A word collage about my life.
7 total reviews
Comment from Tyl3R
Interesting. A quick glimpse of Tempest's life. Clever how you tied the young wolf needing your care to feed on milk as a pup with her growing into the provider of milk later on in life.
Congratulations with winning.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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Interesting. A quick glimpse of Tempest's life. Clever how you tied the young wolf needing your care to feed on milk as a pup with her growing into the provider of milk later on in life.
Congratulations with winning.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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Thank you! I am very grateful for the six stars and your review!
Comment from Sally Law
A wonderful, sweet story of Tempest and her pups. The picture you chose was shrinking and probably a close resemblance to her. Animals are usually very devoted to their offspring guarding and caring for them. Humans can learn from such examples.
My one critique: Use paragraph breaks more. This makes it easier in the eye and will give you the higher ratings you deserve. Two or three in this short text would be fine.
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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A wonderful, sweet story of Tempest and her pups. The picture you chose was shrinking and probably a close resemblance to her. Animals are usually very devoted to their offspring guarding and caring for them. Humans can learn from such examples.
My one critique: Use paragraph breaks more. This makes it easier in the eye and will give you the higher ratings you deserve. Two or three in this short text would be fine.
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the stars and your helpful review.
Comment from Mary Alderete
Is that a photo of Tempest? Beautiful animal. And really beautiful character, too. I loved reading this poem. It's the first 6 stars I've given. I wish I had met Tempest.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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Is that a photo of Tempest? Beautiful animal. And really beautiful character, too. I loved reading this poem. It's the first 6 stars I've given. I wish I had met Tempest.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018
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I thank you so much for the stars and the review. I am truly humbled that this piece would receive your first six star rating. I sometimes refer to her as my sheep in wolf clothing, as she had such a sweet and gentle nature.
Comment from EnvisionFAR
What a great story! Thank you for selecting my photograph to accompany it. Your opening line was enticing and held my interest to continue reading. Your story telling made it easy to visualize the events. The ending is so bittersweet!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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What a great story! Thank you for selecting my photograph to accompany it. Your opening line was enticing and held my interest to continue reading. Your story telling made it easy to visualize the events. The ending is so bittersweet!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Yes, the ending is bittersweet. I thank you ever so much for the stars and the review! I consider it an honor and a privilege to use your stunning piece of artwork in with my story.
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Thank you kindly for your flattering comments :)
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Truth, I plead truth!
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Lol, thank you!
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You're welcome!
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Certainly did!
Comment from beizanten
An attention capturing title and very beautiful picture. a pretty well written and warm first paragraph. n A well written story. A well written and sad ending. I wish you best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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An attention capturing title and very beautiful picture. a pretty well written and warm first paragraph. n A well written story. A well written and sad ending. I wish you best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thank you so very much for your thorough review as well as all the stars and the best wishes!
Comment from humpwhistle
I touching tale. I wish you had more than 300 words to work with, as I think this is a longer story. Hard to cover an entire life in so few words.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Sometime later, while raising her first litter, my Shar Pei, Wrinkles, also whelped her first.--For clarity sake, I think I might replace the pronoun 'her' with Tempest. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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I touching tale. I wish you had more than 300 words to work with, as I think this is a longer story. Hard to cover an entire life in so few words.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Sometime later, while raising her first litter, my Shar Pei, Wrinkles, also whelped her first.--For clarity sake, I think I might replace the pronoun 'her' with Tempest. Just a thought.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Yes, I put in the details that I thought were most important. Just getting ready to change that. Thanks for all the stars, the review and the suggestion!
Comment from meeshu
I enjoyed reading this work, you have created some great images and a wonderful story mother-love. Canines have such a peaceful and reverent way of dying..
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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I enjoyed reading this work, you have created some great images and a wonderful story mother-love. Canines have such a peaceful and reverent way of dying..
Comment Written 16-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
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Thank you, meeshu, for all the wonderful stars and the review. They are both much appreciated.