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Summer's End

minute poem

8 total reviews 
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Dove,

Yes, it is sometimes sad to think of all that winter brings when those cold winds blow, but I just count on the turning of this earth to bring back the warm weather in just a few months,

~MP~

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
    Thanks, patty, for your comments and rating. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Winter's chill is just around the corner as it will soon be November, your poem has a freezing touch to it that bites! He he he, best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018
    Dear Dolly, Thanks for your rating and comments and laughter and best wishes. Love, Donna x
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about the end of summer that is visible everywhere around us and we look forward to the cooler weather of autumn and the colorful leaves around us everywhere.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and rating. Dove
Comment from Elizabeth Joanne
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Ugh! The dread of the cold wintry air and freezing temperatures! Shoveling off frozen cars to go to work and make it home...not looking forward to it this year. Wonderful piece of work here. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear Elizabeth Joanne, Thank you for your comments and rating. Dove
Comment from Debbie Pope
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I am thinking about my undrafted minute poem. I've never done one, and yours was very helpful. I like your mixed use of adjectives, nouns, and verbs for the short lines. Yours reads very well.
Since you are not entering this in the contest, you may not want to bother, but the last line of your second stanza only has 3 syllables. Other than that minor point, great poem.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear Debbie, Thank you for your comments and rating. I will go in an try to edit. Thanks for pointing out the error. Donna
Comment from RodG
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I like how you are able to describe the change of seasons in short,Swift brush strokes. This technique is especially effective in stanza three.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear Rod, Thank you for your comments and rating. Dove
Comment from kiwijenny
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Burning cold winds flay children's cheeks
Cloud mass, sun peeks
I love this...and I know that burning cold...it truly does feel like that
Well penned and picture perfect
God bless

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear kiwijenny, Thank you for your comments and rating. Dove
Comment from Harmony Fulwood
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Beautifully written poem! The only critique I can give it is the rhyme scheme made it feel a bit childish because the vocabulary was so simple. Also "Thunder" does not rhyme with ponder and wonder.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
    Dear Harmony, I was just trying to use some poetic license when I wrote the word "ponder." But thunder and wonder do rhyme. Thank you for your comments and rating. Dove