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14 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Have you been hallucinating? That picture looks absolutely goofy. Maybe it's part of the "me too" movement. Great use of alliteration. As this is a contest entry, you are right-on with the syllable count and this will be an unusual and humorous entry. Brett Kavanagh must be shuttering at the thought of all that pink power coming after him. judi
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
Have you been hallucinating? That picture looks absolutely goofy. Maybe it's part of the "me too" movement. Great use of alliteration. As this is a contest entry, you are right-on with the syllable count and this will be an unusual and humorous entry. Brett Kavanagh must be shuttering at the thought of all that pink power coming after him. judi
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Judi.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from frogbook
A bit of a frightening picture here my friend-may have a nightmare tonight. You do come up with some greats to accomidate your sense of humor and adventurous poem writing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018
A bit of a frightening picture here my friend-may have a nightmare tonight. You do come up with some greats to accomidate your sense of humor and adventurous poem writing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018
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Thanks, FB
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, this is certainly pink panic attack. I'm already running a mile. Great little 5-7-5 poem and wish you all the best with the contest judges. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
Hi Bill, this is certainly pink panic attack. I'm already running a mile. Great little 5-7-5 poem and wish you all the best with the contest judges. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Ulla
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Not sure which is crazier: your chosen pic or that second line...hilarious!! :) :) A solid 5-7-5 with humor and alliteration -- great job! :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
Not sure which is crazier: your chosen pic or that second line...hilarious!! :) :) A solid 5-7-5 with humor and alliteration -- great job! :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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That is an odd picture.
Comment from nomi338
Never underestimate the power of pink. It has much more power than you might think. The pursuit of pink has driven many men over the brink. In the face of pink, some strong men have been known to shrink. Chasing that pink has caused some ships to sink. All hail the power of pink!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
Never underestimate the power of pink. It has much more power than you might think. The pursuit of pink has driven many men over the brink. In the face of pink, some strong men have been known to shrink. Chasing that pink has caused some ships to sink. All hail the power of pink!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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That review makes me blink (incessantly). I hear the clink of ice (oh no, I?m drinking again). I take a drink (oh good, it?s just poison). I think of pink (and take another drink). Humor.
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Ain't rhyming fun. Those who don't think better avoid the pink. Wink, wink
Comment from Earl Corp
Pretty funny. You took three lines and made sense. nice job! Good luck in the contest. Cool picture accompanying the poem. Now get back to work on Bakers Dozen.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
Pretty funny. You took three lines and made sense. nice job! Good luck in the contest. Cool picture accompanying the poem. Now get back to work on Bakers Dozen.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The artwork is hilarious and your poem a gem! The poodle pack are in town, a fun write and your words made me smile Bill, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
The artwork is hilarious and your poem a gem! The poodle pack are in town, a fun write and your words made me smile Bill, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from BeasPeas
Love the poem and the image, but the syllable count is wrong for a 5-7-5.
Middle line: "sculped fur and muscles jacked"
First word should be either: sculpted or scalped
Fourth line: Muscles is 2 syllables.
So middle line has 6 syllables if you use "scalped." And 7 syllables if you use sculpted. Your best choice is: "Scalped fur, muscles jacked."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
Love the poem and the image, but the syllable count is wrong for a 5-7-5.
Middle line: "sculped fur and muscles jacked"
First word should be either: sculpted or scalped
Fourth line: Muscles is 2 syllables.
So middle line has 6 syllables if you use "scalped." And 7 syllables if you use sculpted. Your best choice is: "Scalped fur, muscles jacked."
Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Put the T in; all is well. Thanks, Marilyn.
Comment from Ogden
Wow! That crew will strike fear in the mind of any dog!
One suggestion, Bill. I think "Panic" doesn't work, and a second "Poodle" would make it funnier.
Cheers,
Don
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
Wow! That crew will strike fear in the mind of any dog!
One suggestion, Bill. I think "Panic" doesn't work, and a second "Poodle" would make it funnier.
Cheers,
Don
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Don. I'll consider it.
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You're very welcome, Bill.
Don
Comment from Boogienights
Fantastic! Who are these poodles? They look awesome! I wouldn't mind having some of their muscles and their courage. I love your poodle series, in fact I love all of your series. Thanks for making everyone smile. Bears next? :)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
Fantastic! Who are these poodles? They look awesome! I wouldn't mind having some of their muscles and their courage. I love your poodle series, in fact I love all of your series. Thanks for making everyone smile. Bears next? :)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Bears it will be.