Escape
the road less traveled10 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tetractys describing the moon's reflection that dives into the lake between the thousands of stars shining from the nightsky into the water below.
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A very well-written Tetractys describing the moon's reflection that dives into the lake between the thousands of stars shining from the nightsky into the water below.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This tetractys, Escape, has the right format and lures the readers into the fantastic realm of imagination. We were all enthralled once and need to immerse ourselves again.
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This tetractys, Escape, has the right format and lures the readers into the fantastic realm of imagination. We were all enthralled once and need to immerse ourselves again.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
That reflection really does look like a road, doesn't it? This is a fine Tetractys poem, author, even though I can't pronounce the word, I can still count syllables.
A beautiful image and most original observation.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
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That reflection really does look like a road, doesn't it? This is a fine Tetractys poem, author, even though I can't pronounce the word, I can still count syllables.
A beautiful image and most original observation.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from jeanne2011
Wow, this poem just blew me away. I love the way you arranged the words into the illustration and the way it all just worked together. I especially appreciated the last line, "swim down through the mystery of the stars". It seemed that you connected earth to the universe and the swimmer (individual) to the cosmos. I would hang this poem on my wall any day.
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Wow, this poem just blew me away. I love the way you arranged the words into the illustration and the way it all just worked together. I especially appreciated the last line, "swim down through the mystery of the stars". It seemed that you connected earth to the universe and the swimmer (individual) to the cosmos. I would hang this poem on my wall any day.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from phil nelson
This was enjoyable and is an excellent example of a Tetractys. You have left the reader wanting to hear more--well done
Best of luck in the contest
phil
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This was enjoyable and is an excellent example of a Tetractys. You have left the reader wanting to hear more--well done
Best of luck in the contest
phil
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from John Baltisberger
While I enjoy the alliteration, the subject seems cliche. Magic, Moon, Mystery, Stars. Linguistically this poem is very pleasing, but I don't feel much connection to it emotionally. Of course, that may not be your intent.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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While I enjoy the alliteration, the subject seems cliche. Magic, Moon, Mystery, Stars. Linguistically this poem is very pleasing, but I don't feel much connection to it emotionally. Of course, that may not be your intent.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I'm pleased you enjoyed some aspects of this piece even though the meaning escaped you. It happens with poetry. No worries. :))
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Often, when I've swam at night I have had the feeling that I was bathing in the moon' light. it's such a specific and exciting feeling, and you use it perfectly.
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Often, when I've swam at night I have had the feeling that I was bathing in the moon' light. it's such a specific and exciting feeling, and you use it perfectly.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Wow. A very beautiful and mysterious photo. It does inspire vastness and magic. I love the layout of your words. A well-written tetractys poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow. A very beautiful and mysterious photo. It does inspire vastness and magic. I love the layout of your words. A well-written tetractys poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Nanny 6
Wow! This is a really creative poem for this contest, you can jump right into that picture and the words complement it exquisitely. Good luck in the contest! :-)
Judy
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Wow! This is a really creative poem for this contest, you can jump right into that picture and the words complement it exquisitely. Good luck in the contest! :-)
Judy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
"I'm being followed by a moon shadow.
Moon shadow. Moon shadow."
Such a beautifully constructed tetractys. Visual and emotive imagery are "spot on!" Plus...what's not to love about remembering Cat Stevens? (Hah! Showing my age!)
Best Wishes!
diane
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Hello!
"I'm being followed by a moon shadow.
Moon shadow. Moon shadow."
Such a beautifully constructed tetractys. Visual and emotive imagery are "spot on!" Plus...what's not to love about remembering Cat Stevens? (Hah! Showing my age!)
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018