Poetry NOOK
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Playtime"Eclectic style
6 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Bucketlist!
How very wise and true are your words: children do have the capacity to teach many things to adults, and they invariably do! Perceptive.
If I may make one suggestion, in the first stanza, the third line ends abruptly. I would attach "to us" to that line:
Little tykes are teachers
Even after all we know
They bring the best of life (to us)
As they quickly grow.
Thank you so much for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
Hello Bucketlist!
How very wise and true are your words: children do have the capacity to teach many things to adults, and they invariably do! Perceptive.
If I may make one suggestion, in the first stanza, the third line ends abruptly. I would attach "to us" to that line:
Little tykes are teachers
Even after all we know
They bring the best of life (to us)
As they quickly grow.
Thank you so much for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Hi Kathleen, thanks for your suggestion and review. I couldn?t agree to the suggestion as it was so I reread and compromised. I hope you?ll like the adjustment if you care to reread,. I appreciate your help
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Kathleen S.
Now, you know exactly why I like children better than some adults... sorry.. Seriously, you learn much in your youth. You learn how to be. The forming of our hearts is so important , don't you agree? I love your poem. It's real.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
Now, you know exactly why I like children better than some adults... sorry.. Seriously, you learn much in your youth. You learn how to be. The forming of our hearts is so important , don't you agree? I love your poem. It's real.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Hi Kathleen! I do agree with you, and a lot of kids are ?screwed up? in their formative years by adult superiority The sad thing is babies don?t come with a How to Raise manual!. Thank you very much for your six star honor. I?m glad you enjoyed my poetry
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from JanPerry
Adults should be more like children and play, enjoy each day. I guess we don't due to worry. Being a child is carefree in the storm.
The rhymes work well, simple and effective.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
Adults should be more like children and play, enjoy each day. I guess we don't due to worry. Being a child is carefree in the storm.
The rhymes work well, simple and effective.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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I appreciate your kind review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks adults have stressful lives, while the children are always free, innocent, pure and natural in their teaching, simple and enjoyable as they teach gracefully, their playtime is ever adventurous and full of fantasy; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
This speaks adults have stressful lives, while the children are always free, innocent, pure and natural in their teaching, simple and enjoyable as they teach gracefully, their playtime is ever adventurous and full of fantasy; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Al I hope your day is wonderful, thanks for reviewing,
Hugs,Trisha
Comment from Y. M. Roger
And no trust words could e'er be spoken, Trisha - just lovely!! :) ;) The innocence if a child is unparalleled in the perspective of choice for anyone who wishes to peel away the layers of stress in such we crazy adults willingly wrap ourselves! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing that with us today! :) ;) Yvette ;)
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
And no trust words could e'er be spoken, Trisha - just lovely!! :) ;) The innocence if a child is unparalleled in the perspective of choice for anyone who wishes to peel away the layers of stress in such we crazy adults willingly wrap ourselves! :) ;)
Thank you for sharing that with us today! :) ;) Yvette ;)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your warm review
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A thoughtful write Trisha and children have no comprehension of the angst and stress of adults and the shouldn't be exposed to it anyway, a sentimental view of children, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
A thoughtful write Trisha and children have no comprehension of the angst and stress of adults and the shouldn't be exposed to it anyway, a sentimental view of children, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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How very true. Our negative behaviours change their innocence. Thanks so much
Hugs, Trisha