Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

"I THINK IN MY VIEW"> I find this uselessly repetitive. Start with either "I think" or "In my view, " but I don't think you should use both. The rest of your essay is good although I think you could have written more. I agree with you that the world is too divided and we need to start supporting each other if we're ever to live in peace. Every man for himself is a totally unhealthy philosophy and it harms each of us individually, as well as the wonderful planet we inhabit.

Good luck in the contest, Raul. I like your philosophy.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much!

Comment from Therese103

Excellent

This is a very good entry for the Make the World Better writing prompt. You seem to cover nearly every area of problems:-) I wish you all the best in the contest!
Blessings, Therese

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is quite well written, my friend. I share your point of view 100%. The world is a sad place these days. Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I certainly agree with your observations and exhortations, plus you followed the requirements of the prompt successfully. (I would eliminate "the" before "man" and perhaps add "plus" in the eight line.) Yes, we need to be united, resolve world issues and make peace. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018

Thanks, my friend! :)

Comment from Susanjohn

Excellent

Nice little writing prompt using up those 4 words. Big message in a little write. Wouldn't this world be so much better if we all treated each other with respect and love. sigh

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you very much!

reply by Susanjohn on 10-Aug-2018

You're welcome. :-) have a great weekend.

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you, and have a great weekend to you too, my friend!

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

It's hard to ague with your sentiments. But some might argue that
civilization and war are mutually exclusive.
Most of us want peace. The 'how-to' is the difficult part.

Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you!

Comment from Renee J. St.Germain

Excellent

Wow! I would find this writing prompt to be quite challenging for me. You did a great job though. You used all words, kept it to one sentence and used proper punctuation.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you! You have made my day! 😇

Comment from KL Williams

Excellent

I agree with your writing Raul. We have had a huge part in the violence and destruction of this beautiful planet that God gave us; and the only way to restore the evil is to be more like Christ. If we looked to each other with love and respect there would be less violence, and definitely make a better world. Best of luck in the contest! ~Katie

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks! :)

Comment from Cybertron1986

Excellent

I admire the truth that you successfully emphasized in your piece. You being out many relevant issues with a strong and direct voice. Very difficult to do with using less than 40 words, but you've captured the gist of the issue. Well done

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you! :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Good job in getting your thoughts clearly expressed in these 40 words. I totally agree that we need to focus on peace and united, we can help achieve that peace and help our planet together.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you!