Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Cybertron1986
So much vivid expression here that is additionally supplemented through a unique visual presentation.
I was caught with many genuine lines. However, the one that connected me was, "...she must live right here on this canvas."
That line alone brings to life everything what Mona Lisa is today.
A masterful piece.
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So much vivid expression here that is additionally supplemented through a unique visual presentation.
I was caught with many genuine lines. However, the one that connected me was, "...she must live right here on this canvas."
That line alone brings to life everything what Mona Lisa is today.
A masterful piece.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from LaFrance
This is an excellent entry in the Mona Lisa poem contest. I love the inter-playing dialogue between the apprentice, Master, the painting, and even the spirit. The rhythm and structure of the poem flowed through out.
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This is an excellent entry in the Mona Lisa poem contest. I love the inter-playing dialogue between the apprentice, Master, the painting, and even the spirit. The rhythm and structure of the poem flowed through out.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
Are the iconic Mona Lisa. I wish to see her in person one day. I love the banter between apprentice and master . Well done
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Are the iconic Mona Lisa. I wish to see her in person one day. I love the banter between apprentice and master . Well done
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent presentation for entry in the Per Mona Lisa con Amore contest. You have made the words project your take on Da Vinci speaking to an apprentice. Your projection is humorous. I would have shown it backwards like a reflection in a mirror just to ... some people off. You are much nicer than I am. Well done.
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This is an excellent presentation for entry in the Per Mona Lisa con Amore contest. You have made the words project your take on Da Vinci speaking to an apprentice. Your projection is humorous. I would have shown it backwards like a reflection in a mirror just to ... some people off. You are much nicer than I am. Well done.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is cleverly written. I liked the dialogue between the mater and his apprentice and how it shows your take on the Mona Lisa. I saw no errors, and this is a great entry for the competition, so best of luck. I actually found the Mona Lisa an incredible disappointment, LOL. It was such a small and insignificant work compared to others in the Louvre.
Thanks for sharing your poem, which was a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
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Hello, this is cleverly written. I liked the dialogue between the mater and his apprentice and how it shows your take on the Mona Lisa. I saw no errors, and this is a great entry for the competition, so best of luck. I actually found the Mona Lisa an incredible disappointment, LOL. It was such a small and insignificant work compared to others in the Louvre.
Thanks for sharing your poem, which was a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Mr. Contestant;
-What an acute apparition of an insight into the life of Leonardo da Vinci and his apprentice. You developed a realism, first-hand, as the reader Has been thrown into a situation where the Masters teaching the student.
-You done it is such a fluid way that I felt like I was there witnessing, an obvious, Situation where the master is helping the student understand the realism of his work.
-Beautifully written and good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one..
Alex
PS: love the compositional colors and font use of different colors.
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Cheers, Mr. Contestant;
-What an acute apparition of an insight into the life of Leonardo da Vinci and his apprentice. You developed a realism, first-hand, as the reader Has been thrown into a situation where the Masters teaching the student.
-You done it is such a fluid way that I felt like I was there witnessing, an obvious, Situation where the master is helping the student understand the realism of his work.
-Beautifully written and good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one..
Alex
PS: love the compositional colors and font use of different colors.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
This is truly wonderful. You bring daVinci to life here in the most exciting way. At the same time you show what is in an artists soul really. A truly incredible tribute that gives me a new perspective on art and this particular work. NG
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This is truly wonderful. You bring daVinci to life here in the most exciting way. At the same time you show what is in an artists soul really. A truly incredible tribute that gives me a new perspective on art and this particular work. NG
Comment Written 17-May-2018