Precious Gems
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Seaside Tableau"Na-po-wri-mo
9 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Your descriptive use of words takes the reader to the beach and I can feel the salty air and the ocean breeze. You have a smooth use of rhyming words that makes the poem flow like the ocean.
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Your descriptive use of words takes the reader to the beach and I can feel the salty air and the ocean breeze. You have a smooth use of rhyming words that makes the poem flow like the ocean.
Comment Written 02-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Dear mermaids, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Air Spirit
This is a mood poem that reflects the serenity, sights, sounds & state of mind that water/oceans can have on us. Your words painted the picture and picture painted the words.
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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This is a mood poem that reflects the serenity, sights, sounds & state of mind that water/oceans can have on us. Your words painted the picture and picture painted the words.
Comment Written 02-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Air Spirit, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the beach most when the close of day comes and the sun is setting and the beaches are empty, you set the scene in your poem which is imaginative and filled with life, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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I love the beach most when the close of day comes and the sun is setting and the beaches are empty, you set the scene in your poem which is imaginative and filled with life, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. Love, Dove (Donna)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Dove;
You did a great job of describing that wondrous feeling as you watch the sunset at the beach. The colors are fascinating, but so is the change in the light. I enjoyed the artwork and your words,
~patty~
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Hi, Dove;
You did a great job of describing that wondrous feeling as you watch the sunset at the beach. The colors are fascinating, but so is the change in the light. I enjoyed the artwork and your words,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear patty, Thank you for your kind comments and review. Dove
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Donna!
I'm so glad to see that you tried a Tableau poem. Your form is perfect. Just so you know, you can have as many stanzas as you like - they all just have to follow suit with six five syllable lines. Rhyme is optional. You did a great job on this! Thanks for the mention in the author's notes.
Kim
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Hi Donna!
I'm so glad to see that you tried a Tableau poem. Your form is perfect. Just so you know, you can have as many stanzas as you like - they all just have to follow suit with six five syllable lines. Rhyme is optional. You did a great job on this! Thanks for the mention in the author's notes.
Kim
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Kim, Thank you for your comments and review. Donna
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very beautiful Seaside Tableau poem you have penned. You used very good wording and I love the art work you chose. You did a very good job on this. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. love, Teri
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Donna, This is a very beautiful Seaside Tableau poem you have penned. You used very good wording and I love the art work you chose. You did a very good job on this. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. love, Teri
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. Donna
Comment from karenina
I've read one other Tableau poem and the form appeals to me....yours especially, as I find the most peace this side of heaven at the seashore.... The sights and sounds you gather in your poem are familiar and friendly and comforting....
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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I've read one other Tableau poem and the form appeals to me....yours especially, as I find the most peace this side of heaven at the seashore.... The sights and sounds you gather in your poem are familiar and friendly and comforting....
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Dear Karenina, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
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Nice back to the sea poem...
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, yes, and triple yes. I'm vacation in Mexico right now in the seaside town of Puerto Vallarta where I walk the bbeach every day at different times of day, so I can really see all of the imagery and sounds you write about. I particularly love these lines because I see this every evening:
Take care - undertow
Beach emptying crowds
I can't read Spanish well, but I can read the picture symbol signs warning swimmers.
Yes, there is a certain eerieness to the waves. It's like they are stalking humans.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Yes, yes, and triple yes. I'm vacation in Mexico right now in the seaside town of Puerto Vallarta where I walk the bbeach every day at different times of day, so I can really see all of the imagery and sounds you write about. I particularly love these lines because I see this every evening:
Take care - undertow
Beach emptying crowds
I can't read Spanish well, but I can read the picture symbol signs warning swimmers.
Yes, there is a certain eerieness to the waves. It's like they are stalking humans.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Dear Sis Cat, I hope you have a lovely vacation, and thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Auto-Manic
Nice photo, works well with the poem of beach affair. Compressing time into a bold synopsis of feeling and emotions creates the smell and taste of salt water as beach do their thing not noticed by the poetic stream they're in.
Nice job
AM
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Nice photo, works well with the poem of beach affair. Compressing time into a bold synopsis of feeling and emotions creates the smell and taste of salt water as beach do their thing not noticed by the poetic stream they're in.
Nice job
AM
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Dear AM, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove