Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Aw, lighten up. Life doesn't have to be all lettuce. Let the kiddos have some pizza once in a while. As long as they don't make a consistent diet of pizza and stuffage. How about some pizza with lettuce on the side? I hope Mom doesn't work in a school cafeteria. I like the use of the "You don't get us" expression. So typical of the young. Fun rhyme. Great picture. judi

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018

Thanks, Judi, for giving this a look. Bill

reply by judiverse on 03-Apr-2018

You're welcome. A snail's eye view. judi

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

That was real slick, like the trail a snail leaves behind. I loved the roughage and stuffage link. That is just like a kid, pizza before lettuce. All that cheese could block up the works and then they'd just be sitting on the throne looking lie real jerks, waiting from something, anything to make its way out an down the old chute. Now ain't that cute?

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks, nomi

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I can't imagine snails eating Pizza! Maybe they would get fat and burst from their shells? What d'yer think Bill? A fun write in the series, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Kids and pizza. Nuff said.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hooray for Mom! Yes, I firmly believe the kids need to eat fresh fruits and veggies not just the snails. Shouldn't the last line rhyme with lettuce and "get us?"

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

If this were a limerick, yes. It is the sudden false note on the last key that makes the music memorable.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Gee they're so cute these little snails. I hope they're smart enough to steer clear of Jungle Jim's mug. But I have my doubts.

Yay, snails. Love it, Bill.

Gloria

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, again, Gloria, for a great review. Bill

Comment from Marisela Contona

Excellent

I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Marisela
(Be careful about cutting and pasting pat reviews. The site will get notices from members and that could be bad for you. Just change them up.) Happy day.

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Bill,

That last line says it all about the snails. You described their slow paces very well in this poem. This is another fine poem that could be appreciated by both adults and children. You have an unique ability to appeal to both.

Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, PF

Comment from Katya

Excellent

Really made me smile. The way you pull a change on the limerick form makes me feel EXACTLY like I have a mother snail who is keeping me at the lettuce despite my yearnings for "stuffage." [Great word, that, incidentally.]
And the picture is just great! Snails on snails!
Thanks.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Katya

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

well done, bill. I love "pizza and stuffage". I thought it was a Limerick
until the last line. curious. a great image with a snail's kids eating pizza.
good job.....meeshu

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, meeshu

reply by meeshu on 01-Apr-2018

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

Kids and kid snails....what are you going to do them? I'm totally with them however, pizza beats out lettuce any day of the week. None of my kids liked lettuce unless it was on a taco :) Thanks for writing these very amusing poems, I really enjoy them.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, BN