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Viewing comments for Chapter 166 "Jellyfish World 3"Animal poetry and short stories
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Comment from frogbook
Whoa-that was just excellent, though not so much for the jellyfish! Very interesting pic and described very well. Great word choices.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Whoa-that was just excellent, though not so much for the jellyfish! Very interesting pic and described very well. Great word choices.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks, FB
Comment from nomi338
It's hell ain't it? One minute you are, the next where the hell did you go? Despite it all, I would rather go through hell every day than die and become extinct, so I muddle through hoping that something good will one day come my way.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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It's hell ain't it? One minute you are, the next where the hell did you go? Despite it all, I would rather go through hell every day than die and become extinct, so I muddle through hoping that something good will one day come my way.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Good things coming.
Comment from lyenochka
Quite a profound one, using the end of life of a jellyfish to remind us of mortality. I didn't know that jellyfish looked like that outside of water! My favorite lines were:
"gossamer turns globulent;
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indignity will complement"
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Quite a profound one, using the end of life of a jellyfish to remind us of mortality. I didn't know that jellyfish looked like that outside of water! My favorite lines were:
"gossamer turns globulent;
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indignity will complement"
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, it does look like the lethal variety. I hope it wasn't what you meant in your very well written poem. One moment life was a joy, the next it was not. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hi Bill, it does look like the lethal variety. I hope it wasn't what you meant in your very well written poem. One moment life was a joy, the next it was not. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Ulla. Just an 'end-of-the-line' poem.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
"What was fluid is no cement," is very telling. And, "life was joy--and then it went" are honest to our society. Life does fly by so fast. I like that your short poem was filled with a life lesson. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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"What was fluid is no cement," is very telling. And, "life was joy--and then it went" are honest to our society. Life does fly by so fast. I like that your short poem was filled with a life lesson. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Cindy
Comment from cailinraine8
aww such a sad end to the poor jellyfish... maybe there is jellyfish heaven, who knows what all exists in our many realms and galaxies... no one can judge after all. ha. I feel out of my element most of the time, I never did fit on this planet and still don't, but I have become ok with that. :) Seriously a nice job of this... one of my favourite words is "gossamer".. mmmmm. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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aww such a sad end to the poor jellyfish... maybe there is jellyfish heaven, who knows what all exists in our many realms and galaxies... no one can judge after all. ha. I feel out of my element most of the time, I never did fit on this planet and still don't, but I have become ok with that. :) Seriously a nice job of this... one of my favourite words is "gossamer".. mmmmm. Nice.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Cailin
Comment from judiverse
Excellent work with your rhyme in this. I could care less about jellyfish, but your poem does give reason to reflect, as stated in your last line "Life was joy--then it went." It's a good thing when a poem like this has you reflecting on the meaning of life. We will have to ask the jellyfish. Excellent alliterative sound with "gossamer" and "globulent." Very thought provoking. judi
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Excellent work with your rhyme in this. I could care less about jellyfish, but your poem does give reason to reflect, as stated in your last line "Life was joy--then it went." It's a good thing when a poem like this has you reflecting on the meaning of life. We will have to ask the jellyfish. Excellent alliterative sound with "gossamer" and "globulent." Very thought provoking. judi
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Judi
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The work reminisces the gory and undignified ending of a specie taken out of its tuft to face its wrath away from its natural environment.
The work highlights the collateral damage occasioned by the change of environment, and the specie's eventual demise.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor, oxymoron, assonance and alliteration.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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The work reminisces the gory and undignified ending of a specie taken out of its tuft to face its wrath away from its natural environment.
The work highlights the collateral damage occasioned by the change of environment, and the specie's eventual demise.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor, oxymoron, assonance and alliteration.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Lloyd, for the thorough review. Bill
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Remain Blessed!
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very well written poem about the jellyfish. You used very good descriptive words with an amazing picture to go with it. I do not know how you find some much to write about the jellyfish, but somehow you do! Great job. I did not see any spag or errors! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Bill, This is a very well written poem about the jellyfish. You used very good descriptive words with an amazing picture to go with it. I do not know how you find some much to write about the jellyfish, but somehow you do! Great job. I did not see any spag or errors! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Bill, this is witty. Did you make up that word glob.... I liked your poem. It's fun and descriptive. A story of the life and death of a jelly-fish in a succint and clever way. Thanks, Ana.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hi Bill, this is witty. Did you make up that word glob.... I liked your poem. It's fun and descriptive. A story of the life and death of a jelly-fish in a succint and clever way. Thanks, Ana.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Ana. Yes, I couldn't find 'globulent' anywhere.
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love it when people get creative with words, maybe i should call you Seuss,hahha