Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 150 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your story of having difficulty with your home help is tragic.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I retired nine years ago and have busier than when I was working. I hope you work out all the details and the arrangements for home help. Best wishes in the Flash Fiction competition- Joan

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend.

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Sounds pretty much what you are going through yourself, but it also makes a good Flash Fiction story. You wrote it well. The frustration of it all comes through. Good work. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good weekend coming up soon.

Comment from Sefiros

Excellent

The very proactive protagonist, which is good. I can sympathize with her, being physically disabled. There are always things I have to do and have to put up with. My blackmailers are my parents who want me to be more considerate and improve my left arm (source of the disability). They don't understand that I gave up on that a long time ago. I'm focusing on what I can do instead of something I clearly cannot. Good work. Keep it up.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a good week. So sorry to hear about your parents.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the words to your poem
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
Since I have been out the hospital my life is so messed up.
I 'm trying get my together it;'s just to much with follow ups with the doctors s
funny they all want to see me within seven day.
Father give me strength
Take care
cookie

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week.

reply by misscookie on 08-Mar-2018

You're very welcome, until next time
Cookie

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I do hope you get the help you need. There were several words I didn't understand. What is a "carer?" Do you mean 'caregiver?"
And what is " blackmilers?" Do you mean "blackmailers?"

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week. Thanks for spotting the mistakes.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Interesting write

Then I cancelled the blackmilers immediately. (Then I immediately cancelled the blackmailers. word misspelled and adverb needs to be close to the verb)

Ending sentences -- I found and then The girl that helps me, first it should be The girl who... and found is past tense and helps is present. You need to decide which tense you want to write in.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week. Thanks for the tips.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Sometimes we need to throw things out to improve our lot. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week.

reply by c_lucas on 08-Mar-2018

You're welcome, Ine. Charlie

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

You are fortunate to be able to stay on top of your medications. What if this had happened to a person who wasn't aware enough to know they hadn't been given the correct medications. You are certainly right to change caregivers if the ones you have aren't working out. Seeing that the patient gets the correct medications is so important. Next to last paragraph, I think you mean where, not were. Hope you will get your home health care situation straightened out. judi

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week.

reply by judiverse on 07-Mar-2018

You're very welcome. Take care. judi

Comment from Rasmine

Good

Hello, Robina, :)

I found a few typos and have suggestions. Make sure you always do your own research because I may be wrong, too:
After threatening them with the Inspection (inspection, unless it is used as a proper noun), they arrived by helicopter (cool!).
The carers (in the USA we say 'caregivers'; it may be different in your country). that I left for a bit less than a week kind of blackmailed me to start on Wednesday. Not anyhing (anything -- may want to put 'new' and get rid of 'before') before.
Then I cancelled (here it is canceled, but may be spelled differently there) the blackmilers (blackmailers) immediately.
I am halfway through the process of changing homehelps (home helps or home helpers) really very necessary.
I found the office were (where) our will is. They could give (space) me the name of Accountants/Book keepers (bookkeepers) (they are in small letters unless proper nouns).

I wish you all the luck in the contest! :)



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 Comment Written 06-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week. My grammarfree did not work. I will correct.