Revenge is a Rough Road
Best Served Cold Contest17 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Congratulations on the win! Well deserved.
I loved the humor - every one must have a car salesman horror story. But then I keep wondering about the motive and you give the reader the understanding as to why the narrator has this particular need for revenge. Well told.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Wow! Congratulations on the win! Well deserved.
I loved the humor - every one must have a car salesman horror story. But then I keep wondering about the motive and you give the reader the understanding as to why the narrator has this particular need for revenge. Well told.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks much.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great story and congratulations on the well deserved win. I enjoyed reading it and liked the way the explanation was left until right at the end. This is great and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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This is a great story and congratulations on the well deserved win. I enjoyed reading it and liked the way the explanation was left until right at the end. This is great and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thank you for reading and the kind review. I like writing revenge stories-guess it keeps me from being dangerous-LOL.
Comment from Liberty Justice
WHOA! You have my thumbs up, and you are in 1st place by yourself, now. What a shocking way to take revenge for the salesman selling woman's daughter a faulty vehicle causing her to crash in the car. This woman really did that salesman in. This ending was unexpected and serious. WELL DONE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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WHOA! You have my thumbs up, and you are in 1st place by yourself, now. What a shocking way to take revenge for the salesman selling woman's daughter a faulty vehicle causing her to crash in the car. This woman really did that salesman in. This ending was unexpected and serious. WELL DONE. liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks much, appreciate you reading and your thoughtful review.
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Did you win? liberty justice
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Yes, thanks. Thanks for the encouragement along the way.
Comment from Katie Solis
That was an awesome revenge story, with such a rich motivation behind it. Good job in telling a complete story in such a limited amount of words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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That was an awesome revenge story, with such a rich motivation behind it. Good job in telling a complete story in such a limited amount of words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks much, appreciate you reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a very good entry in the Best Served Cold flash fiction about revenge. What a devious mind you have! Good job keeping the story flowing and holding the readers interest in just why she was out to get this slime ball. Parents could relate to the need to seek revenge after the death of a child. The picture you chose fits your story perfectly. Best of luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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This is a very good entry in the Best Served Cold flash fiction about revenge. What a devious mind you have! Good job keeping the story flowing and holding the readers interest in just why she was out to get this slime ball. Parents could relate to the need to seek revenge after the death of a child. The picture you chose fits your story perfectly. Best of luck in the competition!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much...especially for the devious mind part-haha. There's just something about a revenge story that lets off a little steam. I did love the pic-appreciate your read and great review.
Comment from jenintorre
Wow. Fabulous story. I was gripped. What a fantastic entry for the revenge contest. I loved the way you didn't reveal why you were doing this until the very end. SPOT ON!
Best wishes and good luck. Jen.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Wow. Fabulous story. I was gripped. What a fantastic entry for the revenge contest. I loved the way you didn't reveal why you were doing this until the very end. SPOT ON!
Best wishes and good luck. Jen.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much for your kind review and generous green star. I like revenge stories-guess it lets off a little steam-Ha.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I was with this right up until the final couple of paragraphs when logic and believability started to get stretched just a bit too much.
You may wish to consider a mild warning for language. people tend to get a funny about no warnings on posts.
that and the fact I had seen the last drip from the severed brake line in the rear-view window. - that's not really believable.
I released my seat belt - seatbelt can be a single word here.
I released my seat belt and his, in one swift motion. - again this doesn't really work thinking about the mechanics. It can't be done in one swift motion.
hoped the second shriek was him discovering his door would not unlock. - there is no indication in the story that this had been tampered with and couldn't be done from the outside of the vehicle. (early it says the passenger was underneath.
I could feel the heat on my face from the fire - from 100 feet away? Must have been some fire.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hi there,
I was with this right up until the final couple of paragraphs when logic and believability started to get stretched just a bit too much.
You may wish to consider a mild warning for language. people tend to get a funny about no warnings on posts.
that and the fact I had seen the last drip from the severed brake line in the rear-view window. - that's not really believable.
I released my seat belt - seatbelt can be a single word here.
I released my seat belt and his, in one swift motion. - again this doesn't really work thinking about the mechanics. It can't be done in one swift motion.
hoped the second shriek was him discovering his door would not unlock. - there is no indication in the story that this had been tampered with and couldn't be done from the outside of the vehicle. (early it says the passenger was underneath.
I could feel the heat on my face from the fire - from 100 feet away? Must have been some fire.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the suggestions. Appreciate the read.
Comment from emptypage
This is really, really good. I am impressed. I knew something was coming, but not what, or why, and you answered both awesomely. I love the revenge and wish, in that real scenario, something better could be done. Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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This is really, really good. I am impressed. I knew something was coming, but not what, or why, and you answered both awesomely. I love the revenge and wish, in that real scenario, something better could be done. Nice job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much-pleased that u enjoyed!
Comment from Ogden
This is a terrific autobiographical account of an understandably horrific revenge murder. It took a lot of hate and a of of guts to pull it off. And a lot of sadism.
(I didn't know you can do FS in the slammer.)
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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This is a terrific autobiographical account of an understandably horrific revenge murder. It took a lot of hate and a of of guts to pull it off. And a lot of sadism.
(I didn't know you can do FS in the slammer.)
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Ha-This is why we write so we can just imagine revenge-LOL. Thanks much.
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You are welcome, mystery writer.
Don
Comment from Wetbelly01
Wow!... What an awesome tale of revenge!... I Like IT!
Reminds me never to make you mad at me!
My compliments on such a great piece...
And Good Luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Wow!... What an awesome tale of revenge!... I Like IT!
Reminds me never to make you mad at me!
My compliments on such a great piece...
And Good Luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Ha-thanks much I must say revenge stories are a favorite of mine-guess it helps some to get what's coming to them in a less destructive way. Lucky you didn't give me a bad review-heh, heh, heh.
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Yeah, so AM I... LOL!
