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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever write and how you were able to write the dielectric is amazing! The accent came out so well and I heard your words! This is not easy to write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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This is a clever write and how you were able to write the dielectric is amazing! The accent came out so well and I heard your words! This is not easy to write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Dolly. The accents are fun for me, but tough for readers. Bill
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Perhaps you could add a note to read the words phonetically? This may help. The spanish language is phonetic, but English often isn?t. I read your words out load so that I could understand them and hey presto I was speaking like a yank! Love Dolly x
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another good chapter in your Aardvark tale.
Although I am having a little trouble understanding some of the lingo.
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next bit.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Another good chapter in your Aardvark tale.
Although I am having a little trouble understanding some of the lingo.
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next bit.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Sorry about the speaking sounds. I get carried away.
Comment from apky
This had me foaring:
Bear: Zo yo haf mayd aughter mockink bobbies wif thees craytons?
Aardvark: I'll be gintle.
Priceless, Aadvark, priceless! With that tubular snout, and the long extensible tongue, too good to reserve only for the termites, heaven's the girl will have the time of her life!
Great piece, Bill.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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This had me foaring:
Bear: Zo yo haf mayd aughter mockink bobbies wif thees craytons?
Aardvark: I'll be gintle.
Priceless, Aadvark, priceless! With that tubular snout, and the long extensible tongue, too good to reserve only for the termites, heaven's the girl will have the time of her life!
Great piece, Bill.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Aki, for giving this a look. The aardvark has high hopes. This is Aardvark World, after all; he ought to leave an impression somewhere.
Comment from Spitfire
It's hard at times to understand the creatures. Reading it out loud helps. I like the premise. It made me think about breeders who like to mate two different types of animals. Defects often result.
Image crossing a cockroach with an ant. LOL.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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It's hard at times to understand the creatures. Reading it out loud helps. I like the premise. It made me think about breeders who like to mate two different types of animals. Defects often result.
Image crossing a cockroach with an ant. LOL.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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I limited myself to Bear and Aardvark. I know they both need a couple run through so to make sense. Thanks for checking it out, Shari.
Comment from pbomar1115
Yes, I like to story and Lion's guardianship over the undisciplined group. The group falls into place nicely as they prepare for their journey.
Phillip
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Yes, I like to story and Lion's guardianship over the undisciplined group. The group falls into place nicely as they prepare for their journey.
Phillip
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Phillip
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You're welcome, Bill.
Phillip
Comment from brenda faye curtis
Story still good, but it may be going a little too fast for me. I don't remember talk of a permanent detachment in #7. Humor, as always, is sharp and appreciated. I look forward to your next.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Story still good, but it may be going a little too fast for me. I don't remember talk of a permanent detachment in #7. Humor, as always, is sharp and appreciated. I look forward to your next.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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The story begins in Aardvark World 6.
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You're right. I look forward to Aardvark 9, Bill!
Comment from Joan E.
Since I had not been following this play, I appreciated your synopsis and the picture to establish the setting. I enjoyed the accent in contrast with the more science-speak. Fortunately, my "panth" are safe! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Since I had not been following this play, I appreciated your synopsis and the picture to establish the setting. I enjoyed the accent in contrast with the more science-speak. Fortunately, my "panth" are safe! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Aardvark 7 is still promoted, Joan. That might catch you up. This is just the fourth scene.
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Thanks for the heads-up. I'm off to enjoy the scene- Joan
Comment from nomi338
Whoa, it's gettin' stinky in here. is this just a clever ruse for everybody to get laid? A bunch of different creatures getting it on with each other in the hopes of creating some hybrid race of beings. I don't blame the bear for being concerned about his possible future grand children looking funny.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Whoa, it's gettin' stinky in here. is this just a clever ruse for everybody to get laid? A bunch of different creatures getting it on with each other in the hopes of creating some hybrid race of beings. I don't blame the bear for being concerned about his possible future grand children looking funny.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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It seems to have worked, and it only took three thousand years.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I couldn't help myself laughing at how they must populate the planet, lol! I think I'm learning a new language here, Bill, I can almost understand it all now! Loved the ending! LOL. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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I couldn't help myself laughing at how they must populate the planet, lol! I think I'm learning a new language here, Bill, I can almost understand it all now! Loved the ending! LOL. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Sandra. Careful -- once you understand it, then you have to find the double entendres and foreshadowing.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, that makes sense. If the sun goes nova, Pluto may be far enough away to survive, especially if it can drift into a wider orbit somehow. I think Ardvark needs some speech lessons. He's really hard to understand. :)
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Oh, that makes sense. If the sun goes nova, Pluto may be far enough away to survive, especially if it can drift into a wider orbit somehow. I think Ardvark needs some speech lessons. He's really hard to understand. :)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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I'm trying to imagine talking with this huge tongue. Thanks for giving it a look, Phyllis. Bill
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I see. Well, that certainly explains it. I do figure out what he says, just have to read twice.