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Comment from sunnilicious
This poem came out great. I like the flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well thought out and clearly written. Strong and powerful visual imagery. The lizard has a presence. Good author notes too.
Hi Tom! May you have a wonderful Thanksgiving Weekend with an abundance of celebrations and love. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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This poem came out great. I like the flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well thought out and clearly written. Strong and powerful visual imagery. The lizard has a presence. Good author notes too.
Hi Tom! May you have a wonderful Thanksgiving Weekend with an abundance of celebrations and love. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you Alicia. I did. Hooe you did too.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a fun poem Tom. I can see why the log looked like an alligator. It would have taken me back a step or two also. Fun poem, great form!
teresa
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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This is a fun poem Tom. I can see why the log looked like an alligator. It would have taken me back a step or two also. Fun poem, great form!
teresa
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you Teresa.
Comment from Pantygynt
There is a chain of optitions in UK called "Specsavers". Their advertisements on TV involve humerous situations that might not have happened had the protagonists enjoyed better visio. The punch line, which has become a by-line for all cases of mistaken identity, is "should have gone to Specsavers. In one of the ads a shepherd sheers his dog along with the sheep. Your "trompe doeils" these days, first the snake in the woods and now this lead me to say -- "Should have gone to Specsavers!"
Mind you I thought it was a "gator" too when I first looked at the picture. My Dad played that tick on me once when I was very young and we were walking by a river.
A nice little form especially the concluding iambic dimeters.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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There is a chain of optitions in UK called "Specsavers". Their advertisements on TV involve humerous situations that might not have happened had the protagonists enjoyed better visio. The punch line, which has become a by-line for all cases of mistaken identity, is "should have gone to Specsavers. In one of the ads a shepherd sheers his dog along with the sheep. Your "trompe doeils" these days, first the snake in the woods and now this lead me to say -- "Should have gone to Specsavers!"
Mind you I thought it was a "gator" too when I first looked at the picture. My Dad played that tick on me once when I was very young and we were walking by a river.
A nice little form especially the concluding iambic dimeters.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt, I see your point. Loved your story about your dad. Specsavers, I'll have to remember that.
Comment from Joan E.
Another neat addition to your Animated Stills' Collection. I enjoyed your bits of alliteration and rhymes in these Septets, plus your notes of additional context. Your photograph captured the "alligator" perfectly! Cheers and happy Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Another neat addition to your Animated Stills' Collection. I enjoyed your bits of alliteration and rhymes in these Septets, plus your notes of additional context. Your photograph captured the "alligator" perfectly! Cheers and happy Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thank you Joan. As always you brighten my day
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As you do mine! Smiles and here's to a serene, but shiny Sunday- Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written set of septets about the allegations of an alligator in the swamp. Our eyes can sometimes play tricks to make us believe we see things that do not exist.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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A very well-written set of septets about the allegations of an alligator in the swamp. Our eyes can sometimes play tricks to make us believe we see things that do not exist.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thank you Sandra. Yes they really do.
Comment from writerjen
Nicely written Septet...I had forgotten about this poem. It's complicated but you pulled it off nicely. Great picture accompanying your poem, too. It really adds to the overall story of the poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Nicely written Septet...I had forgotten about this poem. It's complicated but you pulled it off nicely. Great picture accompanying your poem, too. It really adds to the overall story of the poem. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thank you writerjen
Comment from Irish Rain
It DOES look like an alligator, until you said 'branch'..I was fooled! Love this tale of your walk, Minnesota must be beautiful in the winter! Blessings...
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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It DOES look like an alligator, until you said 'branch'..I was fooled! Love this tale of your walk, Minnesota must be beautiful in the winter! Blessings...
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you Irish Rain. Yes, I love the winters here. Appreciate the review.
Comment from RodG
I think we have all had similar experiences where we shocked by something we did not expect to see. I like the description of the "alligator" in stanza 1 and your use of enjambment. I like how the Speaker shifts his focus to himself in stanza 2, emphasizing that jolt of surprise when he realizes what it really is.
An interesting format with an intriguing rhyme pattern. Fun to see something new. Rod
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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I think we have all had similar experiences where we shocked by something we did not expect to see. I like the description of the "alligator" in stanza 1 and your use of enjambment. I like how the Speaker shifts his focus to himself in stanza 2, emphasizing that jolt of surprise when he realizes what it really is.
An interesting format with an intriguing rhyme pattern. Fun to see something new. Rod
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you RodG. I'm appreciative that you really got into it. Thanks for the review. Isn't it so true about that common experience?
Comment from tfawcus
The anecdotes behind your photographs always make interesting reading, Tom. I like the way the uneven line lengths here create a tempo that echoes the sense of surprise in the first instance and relief in the second! My father-in-law had a similar experience in reverse during WW2, treading on what he thought was a log while crossing a stream in the PNG jungle. He must have taken the poor beast by surprise, for he lived to tell the tale! (On several occasions!)
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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The anecdotes behind your photographs always make interesting reading, Tom. I like the way the uneven line lengths here create a tempo that echoes the sense of surprise in the first instance and relief in the second! My father-in-law had a similar experience in reverse during WW2, treading on what he thought was a log while crossing a stream in the PNG jungle. He must have taken the poor beast by surprise, for he lived to tell the tale! (On several occasions!)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you Tony. Gosh, I guess I'd prefer y way. Thanks for the review and the related story. I'm appreciative of the critique.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is Well written a great team and imagery a surprising thought to somebody who mysteriously it's about to go under the sea with sharks but anyhow enjoy this and enjoy some alligator one day straight quite tasty dr. Ricky 1024 review coming through a cell phone with no punctuation possible grammar issues
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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This is Well written a great team and imagery a surprising thought to somebody who mysteriously it's about to go under the sea with sharks but anyhow enjoy this and enjoy some alligator one day straight quite tasty dr. Ricky 1024 review coming through a cell phone with no punctuation possible grammar issues
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank You Ricky. Beware the sharks. I have eaten alligator on a stick at our State Fair. Much like chicken.