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Viewing comments for Chapter 229 "Walrus World 4"Animal poetry and short stories
9 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
I like this one, Bill. Humorous with fun words. Poem does have form with syllables 4, 4, 7 except for line nine which has 8 with "mustachioed" but never mind. That's a great word.
"shameel" (schlemiel)
Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
I like this one, Bill. Humorous with fun words. Poem does have form with syllables 4, 4, 7 except for line nine which has 8 with "mustachioed" but never mind. That's a great word.
"shameel" (schlemiel)
Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks, Marilyn, for giving this a look. I looked up the spelling, but yours is the one I wanted.
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Your welcome. It comes from years of NY living.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Very cute. Reads musically. Winter king? I guess a hide like a walrus should be perfect for winter. In his own way, he is a "cutey" but "beauty" well, in the "blubbery sense." I won't ask why.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Lol. Very cute. Reads musically. Winter king? I guess a hide like a walrus should be perfect for winter. In his own way, he is a "cutey" but "beauty" well, in the "blubbery sense." I won't ask why.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from nomi338
Why ask why indeed? Do you want the truth? Can you handle the truth? If he is a cutey then roottie toottie. Let her rip then take a sip of my rootie beer, let's all cheer, grab your gear and get the hell outta here, because my dear, I fear that the end is very near!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Why ask why indeed? Do you want the truth? Can you handle the truth? If he is a cutey then roottie toottie. Let her rip then take a sip of my rootie beer, let's all cheer, grab your gear and get the hell outta here, because my dear, I fear that the end is very near!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thanks, nomi
Comment from Jay Squires
Just what the doctor ordered, Bill. I mean that sincerely. The balance of humor's good! Just out of the hospital (2 days out) after a three day stint for MILD congestive heart failure.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
Just what the doctor ordered, Bill. I mean that sincerely. The balance of humor's good! Just out of the hospital (2 days out) after a three day stint for MILD congestive heart failure.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Glad to see you're back, Jay. Sorry about your illness. Thanks for the big review. Bill
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Bill
Another really fun poem, love your prehistoric word fest, some great lines, creativity at its best, very well done, my friend............
Mitchell
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
Hi Bill
Another really fun poem, love your prehistoric word fest, some great lines, creativity at its best, very well done, my friend............
Mitchell
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Mitchell, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wonderful! I love the wording in these stanzas, they are a lot of fun in the
sing-song format you've used. They are perfect for the fun illustrations. I really enjoyed reading this one. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
Wonderful! I love the wording in these stanzas, they are a lot of fun in the
sing-song format you've used. They are perfect for the fun illustrations. I really enjoyed reading this one. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Poetic Friend
Bill,
This poem is very cute. What an appropriate name for a Walrus! That name is a tongue twister, and it's fun trying to pronounce the name.
The alliteration and assonance are cute as well.
I enjoyed reading this poem.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
Bill,
This poem is very cute. What an appropriate name for a Walrus! That name is a tongue twister, and it's fun trying to pronounce the name.
The alliteration and assonance are cute as well.
I enjoyed reading this poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you, PF, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Hahaha, Bill, wonderful poem about your friend the walrus. He is a wonderful animal and he really appeals to my sense of humour. I love your poem and the play of words. Looking out for more. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
Hahaha, Bill, wonderful poem about your friend the walrus. He is a wonderful animal and he really appeals to my sense of humour. I love your poem and the play of words. Looking out for more. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Ulla, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another fun Walrus poem. Well done. Although I'm struggling to say the first word.
Good rhythm. Kind of zany.
I liked it.
Sharon
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
Another fun Walrus poem. Well done. Although I'm struggling to say the first word.
Good rhythm. Kind of zany.
I liked it.
Sharon
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Sharon, for the great review. Bill