Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. You use very descriptive words to define your star-filled bright skies and good use of alliteration of a-words. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Thanks for reading and critique zanya

Comment from IndianaIrish

Good

A good descriptive nature poem with great imagery. However, the first line needs to be 5 Syllables since it is a 5-7-5 contest. Your line is only 4 Syllables, so you need to add one more. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Thanks for reading and syllable count req. zanya

Comment from GracieAnn

Good

Try as I might, I cannot count 5 syllables in line one but instead 4. I gave a four rating for it but would have liked to give a five because of the write's profound final line. What if your wrote
Star-filled skies on a
wintry moonlit night create
astral alchemy

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Thanks for reminder re syllables and critique zanya

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image and presentation.
-Very good imagery with the skies
and the winter moonlight.
-You have an excellent satori line.
-One problem with the syllable count
is line one:

Star/ ry /skies/ on is only 4 syllables;
you need 5.
**Note: I am giving you 5
stars because I assume you will
make the change so your poem counts
in the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017

Thanks for spotting the syllable count !! - much appreciated --- great review zanya