The Eidolon
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Chapter 7: Yin And Yang"Family heinously murdered. The question is by who?
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I am enthralled with the writing as it is different using the mystical and the real time. Also I did enjoy the introduction of the twins using the term you did because I had twins and can relate. I assume there must be a special reason for the twins
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am enthralled with the writing as it is different using the mystical and the real time. Also I did enjoy the introduction of the twins using the term you did because I had twins and can relate. I assume there must be a special reason for the twins
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Glad you are enjoying this story and always good to hear from you.
I decided to try to return to posting, although I was mighty unhappy about all the cut and paste reviews I had been receiving, not from you, but many other FanStorians.
The disclaimer I added to the end of the writing, so far any way, seems to have put a stop to that.
Now, maybe I can move forward with my FanStory writing.
There is more about the twins to come.
Comment from Sankey
I am trying to figure out what "Vanity Reviews" are? Are they the cut and paste ones? I do not do cut and paste reviews as you know. This seemed like a "joining" chapter in between all the drama and an insight to the Detective's family life. Well done, mate.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I am trying to figure out what "Vanity Reviews" are? Are they the cut and paste ones? I do not do cut and paste reviews as you know. This seemed like a "joining" chapter in between all the drama and an insight to the Detective's family life. Well done, mate.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Vanity reviews, cut and paste reviews, they are the same thing. They are absolutely worthless and offer nothing to the writer.
Always good to hear from you.
Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Oh, and guess, what? I received NO cut and paste reviews for this chapter.
Guess my disclaimer kept them away.
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Good news. Glad you are still around. Did I tell ya Charley Lucas inspired the Poem on Rewards equal to pride in your work. Night Night off to bed early tonight.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
At the risk of writing a vanity review let me say I did enjoy the chapter. I am not an author, I am a poet and I cannot critic you on many aspects of writing, but if I see something wrong I will tell you. A miss-placed word or one spelled wrong or some punctuation mistakes wold be the scope of my help. I am probably leaving soon as well. Good Job. Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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At the risk of writing a vanity review let me say I did enjoy the chapter. I am not an author, I am a poet and I cannot critic you on many aspects of writing, but if I see something wrong I will tell you. A miss-placed word or one spelled wrong or some punctuation mistakes wold be the scope of my help. I am probably leaving soon as well. Good Job. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I have always thought your reviews were spot on. What drives me up the wall are cut-and-paste reviews so many FanStorians think they can mass produce to quickly pick up Funny Money. It was a part of why I stepped away from this site for a while and why I did, and will, continue to post a Disclaimer at the end of my writings going forth. To these members, I meant what I said in that if that is the only review they can write I would much prefer they do no t review my writings.
Comment from apky
First off, I really did enjoy the story. I'd missed it for a while now, and was glad to have it back.
I completely agree with you about the reviews. I joined in February and took the 2-yr option, which I soon regretted precisely because of the sort of reviews here. Unfortunately I couoldn't get my money back because the 7-day mark had passed and Tom refused to even reduce to make it a one-year member and refund me the second year's fees. Too bad. On the other hand I have found a couple of good and true friends and reviews here, and they have sweeten my regret somewhat.
and put an immediate stop to your shananigans(shenanigans)
"(delete space) Always a detective. Can't even finish a nice dinner without being interrupted."
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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First off, I really did enjoy the story. I'd missed it for a while now, and was glad to have it back.
I completely agree with you about the reviews. I joined in February and took the 2-yr option, which I soon regretted precisely because of the sort of reviews here. Unfortunately I couoldn't get my money back because the 7-day mark had passed and Tom refused to even reduce to make it a one-year member and refund me the second year's fees. Too bad. On the other hand I have found a couple of good and true friends and reviews here, and they have sweeten my regret somewhat.
and put an immediate stop to your shananigans(shenanigans)
"(delete space) Always a detective. Can't even finish a nice dinner without being interrupted."
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate the catches.
Always good to hear from you.
Comment from pbomar1115
I was a little thrown off because I am familiar with the story and expecting more about Drew and the killings. However, as a result of writing a book, learning more about the background and the family life of the Dardens is fine and proper.
Phillip
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I was a little thrown off because I am familiar with the story and expecting more about Drew and the killings. However, as a result of writing a book, learning more about the background and the family life of the Dardens is fine and proper.
Phillip
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Always good to hear from you.
More about Drew is coming.
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You're welcome.
Phillip
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Well, well, well, Brett Matthews, what a surprise! I am certainly happy to see you have posted again. The last post that I read from you said something about perhaps not coming back. It seemed that you were very upset at something. We have seen this from a few other Fan Storians recently and I got so worried I then promised not to come back either after January. I am so happy to see that you are sticking around. After all I really want to see what is going to happen in this story.
Now I will go to read the story and give you a review but first let me say, "I love the below, thing you did there:
(very important suggestion. As a mother I love that you did this, bravo!)
BUILD A BETTER BOY TRUISM #12: Teach your son how to build a flower garden. Three things boys love are involved: dirt, digging, and water hoses.
Okay, I have completed my reading. I must say it was marvelous and I will also say that you have not attempted to introduce us to Darden's family but you have accomplished introducing us, and rather nicely I must say. I loved the scenery that you have set and the fact that Darden felt safe and secure with his family, He does not like bringing the stress of his work home with him but prefers to enjoy his family and to release the stress of his work days before he enters his domain.
I also love the introduction to the twin boys. I love the differences between them and this is so realistic as I have two sister behind me that are twins so there will be those differences. I am so worried now about the fact that this murderer child has escaped and what this will mean for Darden's lovely family. I am so sorry that I do not have a six star rating to give as I thought you would be gone for a while.
I am totally enjoying this story so I hope that I am not considered one of those vanity reviewers. I know you will say that I am not because I really try to put my heart in my reviews the same way that I hope my reviewers will put their heart in to reviewing my work. I came to Fan Story because I already published a poetry book which I rushed and therefore it is on the market with some errors. I pulled it twice which was very time consuming and very expensive. So now that I am writing my life story and new poetry for my new books, I figured that I better get some honest reviews for my work. I realize that I could also learn from some of the great writers her in Fan Story.
I must say though the discord and seeming anger that I am seeing in some of the intellects on this site is quite concerning and I don't like seeing this kind of unhappiness.
I know that you are a very honest guy so if you feel that I am one of those people then I would truly like to know because I rather treasured our friendship. When You all come on with this kind of complaint then new writers like my self are left in wonderment. You must realize this. Also some people just really do not know how to review and are limited with the ability to write enough words to even send the review. Also I do realize that there are some new kids on the block so they are rating exceptional work with three and four stars. This is upsetting to me also.
Anyway I do appreciate this book and I am eagerly waiting to see what is going to happen next.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Well, well, well, Brett Matthews, what a surprise! I am certainly happy to see you have posted again. The last post that I read from you said something about perhaps not coming back. It seemed that you were very upset at something. We have seen this from a few other Fan Storians recently and I got so worried I then promised not to come back either after January. I am so happy to see that you are sticking around. After all I really want to see what is going to happen in this story.
Now I will go to read the story and give you a review but first let me say, "I love the below, thing you did there:
(very important suggestion. As a mother I love that you did this, bravo!)
BUILD A BETTER BOY TRUISM #12: Teach your son how to build a flower garden. Three things boys love are involved: dirt, digging, and water hoses.
Okay, I have completed my reading. I must say it was marvelous and I will also say that you have not attempted to introduce us to Darden's family but you have accomplished introducing us, and rather nicely I must say. I loved the scenery that you have set and the fact that Darden felt safe and secure with his family, He does not like bringing the stress of his work home with him but prefers to enjoy his family and to release the stress of his work days before he enters his domain.
I also love the introduction to the twin boys. I love the differences between them and this is so realistic as I have two sister behind me that are twins so there will be those differences. I am so worried now about the fact that this murderer child has escaped and what this will mean for Darden's lovely family. I am so sorry that I do not have a six star rating to give as I thought you would be gone for a while.
I am totally enjoying this story so I hope that I am not considered one of those vanity reviewers. I know you will say that I am not because I really try to put my heart in my reviews the same way that I hope my reviewers will put their heart in to reviewing my work. I came to Fan Story because I already published a poetry book which I rushed and therefore it is on the market with some errors. I pulled it twice which was very time consuming and very expensive. So now that I am writing my life story and new poetry for my new books, I figured that I better get some honest reviews for my work. I realize that I could also learn from some of the great writers her in Fan Story.
I must say though the discord and seeming anger that I am seeing in some of the intellects on this site is quite concerning and I don't like seeing this kind of unhappiness.
I know that you are a very honest guy so if you feel that I am one of those people then I would truly like to know because I rather treasured our friendship. When You all come on with this kind of complaint then new writers like my self are left in wonderment. You must realize this. Also some people just really do not know how to review and are limited with the ability to write enough words to even send the review. Also I do realize that there are some new kids on the block so they are rating exceptional work with three and four stars. This is upsetting to me also.
Anyway I do appreciate this book and I am eagerly waiting to see what is going to happen next.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Always good to hear from you.
I appreciate your reviews and that you enjoy this book.
What drives me crazy are the cut and paste reviews so many FanStorians attempt to use to quickly pick up a few Member Cents.
With the disclaimer I posted at the end of the story, I have not received any.
For a while there it seemed they were the vast majority of what I received every time I posted something.
Suppose I will make that disclaimer a part of my posting, at least for a while.
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I don't get how they could do that with your stories. There is always something to discuss after reading anything that you write. I get involved.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. Learning about the detective's family is a great change and surprise that the family is still strong. Two boys need a firm but loving father while growing up.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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A very well-written chapter. Learning about the detective's family is a great change and surprise that the family is still strong. Two boys need a firm but loving father while growing up.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
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Thanks.