The Eidolon
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter 5 - Part 2: Chasing Ghosts"Family heinously murdered. The question is by who?
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Brett:
Oh how you have me anticipating on the edge of my seat to know where that
"ting-a-ling, ting -a - ling" is coming from. I wonder who could be there cause the bells to ring. It could be the wind. (lol) I will soon see because as soon as you post it I will read it.
This is really a very interesting story, very well written and told, very nicely done. Your details are thorough and show your expertise.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Good morning, Brett:
Oh how you have me anticipating on the edge of my seat to know where that
"ting-a-ling, ting -a - ling" is coming from. I wonder who could be there cause the bells to ring. It could be the wind. (lol) I will soon see because as soon as you post it I will read it.
This is really a very interesting story, very well written and told, very nicely done. Your details are thorough and show your expertise.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Glad you enjoyed the ting-a-ling.
I thought it added another layer of suspense to the story.
Appreciate you taking the time to read this and to write a review.
Comment from pbomar1115
If little Drew Larsen killed his family and confessed to raping his sister, along with wrecking each room, he embodies the Tasmanian Devil--in a figure of speech. Detective Darden is fighting to wrap his head around the problem.
Phillip
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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If little Drew Larsen killed his family and confessed to raping his sister, along with wrecking each room, he embodies the Tasmanian Devil--in a figure of speech. Detective Darden is fighting to wrap his head around the problem.
Phillip
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter five.
Your insights appear right on target, perhaps he is the Tasmanian Devil.
In the Bugs Bunny cartoons of yonder year, I liked the Tasmanian Devil. He was hysterical.
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Sure.
Phillip
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I did not understand the last room and the signifience it represented as Drew's room.
This whole piece is excellently written and fills us with the feeling we need to understand the next coming chapters
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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I did not understand the last room and the signifience it represented as Drew's room.
This whole piece is excellently written and fills us with the feeling we need to understand the next coming chapters
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Perhaps the next chapter will clarify that for you.
Always appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Spitfire
A superb chapter that doesn't leave much to the imagination. Now, the question arises about cults. Perhaps the whole family was involved.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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A superb chapter that doesn't leave much to the imagination. Now, the question arises about cults. Perhaps the whole family was involved.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
The whole family being involved in a cult would make an interesting angle.
Comment from country ranch writer
Hum are the cases related in some bizarre way? Was the other case solved? If not why? I don't think the boy was in his right mind when this took place what do you think?
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Hum are the cases related in some bizarre way? Was the other case solved? If not why? I don't think the boy was in his right mind when this took place what do you think?
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
You pose some interesting questions here.
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Smiles
Comment from doggymad
A very vivid look at the crime scene, the light from the torch adding to the horror of it all.
No clues as to why Drew would murder this seemingly ordinary people.
May I ask what the
Ting-a-ling! Ting-a-ling!
signifies in the text.
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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A very vivid look at the crime scene, the light from the torch adding to the horror of it all.
No clues as to why Drew would murder this seemingly ordinary people.
May I ask what the
Ting-a-ling! Ting-a-ling!
signifies in the text.
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from apky
This is excellent and still moves at a fast pace, Brett.
My only confession is that I'd missed the continuation
I enjoyed it and found it entertaining. No spags that I could detect. The plot continued to race and is sprinkled with a variety of intriguing situations.
The pace of the story - which is what impresses me most in it - is still great. And that air of mystery remains intact too. I find myself eager to find out what will happen next, if not what is happening anyway.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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This is excellent and still moves at a fast pace, Brett.
My only confession is that I'd missed the continuation
I enjoyed it and found it entertaining. No spags that I could detect. The plot continued to race and is sprinkled with a variety of intriguing situations.
The pace of the story - which is what impresses me most in it - is still great. And that air of mystery remains intact too. I find myself eager to find out what will happen next, if not what is happening anyway.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this chapter was very well written. I think the pace of your writing is excellent. You take your time describing things and helping us get engrossed in your writing. Very enjoyable and the writing was solid.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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I thought this chapter was very well written. I think the pace of your writing is excellent. You take your time describing things and helping us get engrossed in your writing. Very enjoyable and the writing was solid.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter describing the murder scene and the emotions that GI through the detective's mind. A mysterious bell ringing while he goes through the house.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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A very well-written chapter describing the murder scene and the emotions that GI through the detective's mind. A mysterious bell ringing while he goes through the house.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
Comment from Sankey
Good, gruesome read again mate. Getting more and more exciting. You have us expecting someone to jump out at any time. One suggestion. and a couple (of)cardboard boxes stacked on a wooden shelf.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Good, gruesome read again mate. Getting more and more exciting. You have us expecting someone to jump out at any time. One suggestion. and a couple (of)cardboard boxes stacked on a wooden shelf.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of chapter four.
Always appreciate your comments and support.