Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Well, nothing is said about who was on the funeral pyre, nor whose scalp was now hanging at the entrance of the wigwam but we only know of one other character. I guess Edith should have been more understanding of her husband's hobbies.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022

Some hobbyists are crazy.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Oh dear, I hope he didn't mess her hair up when he scalped her!!! Lol, no wonder she called it all nonsense, he was living the life, and she hated it! Another wonderful little story, Bill!! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022

Thank you, Sandra. I seem to dispatch a lot of wives in my stories.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, so you've gone all native, in this wee flash fiction with and element of a surprise. It's difficult to tell a story in mere hundred words, but you managed nicely. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Thanks, Ulla. I tried to put enough in to give you a probable story.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

It is very interesting to me that people who next to nothing of Native Americans develop a reverence for the lifestyles they once practiced and desire to recreate them. If it is beauty of the old practices that you admire, then develop a passion for the practices of your own group, find the beauty that existed within that group. It is great to admire other groups heritage, but do not deny your own.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017

Thank you.

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Thank you.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend a story with an element of mystery all in the limitations for the contest I wonder if Edith was on the pyre as he had no interruption's well done good luck regards Jill

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017

Thanks, Mrs P, for the great review. Bill

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Thanks, Mrs P, for the great review. Bill

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Love the fact that this is a bit of a mystery Bill and leaves unanswered questions.
Wonderful, intriguing story that I enjoyed immensely.........
Mitchell

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017

Thanks, Mitchell, for the great review. Bill

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Thanks, Mitchell, for the great review. Bill

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Bill,

Very nice piece indeed. What happens between the lines is the magic of this piece. Very good. Tone super and meets the requirements.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017

Thanks,G, for seeing the story. Bill

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

BOO seen a lot of these today, mate. BOO'S FAVORITE WORDS: Edith was not a fan of any of this, and called her husband foolish. She referred to his passion as nonsense, and often sabotaged his efforts for spite. No interrupting tonight though.



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 Comment Written 16-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017

Thanks, BOO, for the positive review. Bill

reply by BOO ghost on 17-Sep-2017

I only give positive reviews. Too many negative people on this site already that want to bash us.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Did he murder Edith? Or did she just die? I think she was the corpse here, but you could have made it more clear. Just saying she would not interrupt tonight may not be enough. But I love the idea... worked for me. :)

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

I think the vagueness sells the piece, but I hope it doesn't confuse readers. Thank you, Phyllis, for reviewing this.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well this is creepy Bill. That'll teach 'em not to nag, right?

Your story is written well as required by the contest prompt.

I see no changes. Best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Thank you, Jan.