Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, as I understand it, your bad dream became reality and that's quite scary actually. It's a very well written poem and I liked the way you told a story within. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017

Thanks, Ulla. Rod Serling used to host the early Twilight Zone episodes. One of his frequent themes was the ndless repetion; a sort of hell scenario. Tha's why the last stanza is the sad as the first. Happy day.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Bill. That image is really weird, BUT the perfect companion to your well-rhymed poem. Were you dreaming or not dreaming? Deja vu all over again. A fun write and you included your parents. "Imagine, if you will--" exactly Rod Serling's signature words. Marilyn

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017

Thanks, Marilyn, for giving this a look. I hav Nisi realized that many people have never heard of Rid Serling.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Well. I would say, 'Turn this car around!' ha ha. No way. The dream was creepy, strange enough...but for it to become reality?? Great job here....I miss Rod Serling!!! Blessings...

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017

Thanks, IR.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is a well written fun poem you amaze me how well you use your imagination when writing about the moles I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thanks, Mrs P, for the encouraging review. Bill

Comment from nbonner

Excellent

What a fun poem. I loved the imagery used and the part where they had to dress in mole suits. Comical. Thank you for sharing and best wishes. N.B

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thanks, NB

Comment from damommy

Excellent

What an amusing story in this poem. I loved the rhyme, it was excellent. Very creative.

I wonder what he thought when he woke up and saw the park for real? Hopefully, he won't have to put on a mole suit. LOL

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

I put Rod Serling in there because he liked the idea of the an endless cycle of events.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Da-da-da, da-da-da. Eerie, no? Talk about a bizarre dream, that is definitely one of the strangest yet. I have no love for moles so I hope I will never have a strange dream/nightmare like that ever. I will wager that you were probably reluctant to go back to sleep.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

This was the way to end this as I wasn't sure where to go with it.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Bill. Now this is what I like in a Mole poem lol! It is funny and creative and it gives your reader's imagination quite the work out! Awesome mole pieces. Best of the lot so far. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thanks, Kiwi, for the kind review. Bill

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Wearing that suit, even at an amusement park, would be, as Rod Serling said, a kind of perdition and not a very pleasant one at that.

Touch of humor thrown into this well written poem for good measure.

Fortunately, this was not your destiny.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thanks, Brett, for reviewing this. Bill

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem "Mole World 6". You rhymed it well and told a great story. I also liked your choice of picture.
All the best.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thanks, Marybell, for the nice review. Bill

reply by marybell1 on 21-Aug-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.