Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Ashes"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Mikey. Wow, four poems for the price of one! Unique, dramatic presentation that grabs the reader right from the get-go! Very well written, and much thought and effort put forth in writing this fine entry. My favorite part is "Once an ash is wet and swept away it is part of yesterday" ... love this!
Best wishes for the contest! ~ ~ Connie
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Hi Mikey. Wow, four poems for the price of one! Unique, dramatic presentation that grabs the reader right from the get-go! Very well written, and much thought and effort put forth in writing this fine entry. My favorite part is "Once an ash is wet and swept away it is part of yesterday" ... love this!
Best wishes for the contest! ~ ~ Connie
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Your poem - Ashes - is quite unique, Mike - a variety of styles that you've presented so well - I like the waterfall effect the best - a favourite of mine.
A great entry for the contest.
Good luck
Margaret
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Your poem - Ashes - is quite unique, Mike - a variety of styles that you've presented so well - I like the waterfall effect the best - a favourite of mine.
A great entry for the contest.
Good luck
Margaret
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
Comment from knox413
It is a great poem and I was delighted in the words and pictures.
The descriptive verbs and adjectives were also good.
I feel like it could use some clarity and structure.
Great poem.
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It is a great poem and I was delighted in the words and pictures.
The descriptive verbs and adjectives were also good.
I feel like it could use some clarity and structure.
Great poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from lalajovanoski
hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that this is an excellent entry for the contest you should do very well I wish you all the best and good luck to you. Great alliteration and interesting structure this flow is very soft and smooth. Good rryhming scheme. Thank you for sharing this. God bless you. With
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hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that this is an excellent entry for the contest you should do very well I wish you all the best and good luck to you. Great alliteration and interesting structure this flow is very soft and smooth. Good rryhming scheme. Thank you for sharing this. God bless you. With
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from rspoet
Ah,
those burning bridges sever all chance of connection
Can a phoenix rise from ashes?
or is it just wishful mythology,
All the king's horses and all the king's men,
not even super glue, can hold yesterday together, again
"a sliver of thread
of a dream joined
the stream
looking for a current" --
tears of joy
tears of sorrow
one river
One love
Beautiful poetry
A phoenix for a poet
RS
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Ah,
those burning bridges sever all chance of connection
Can a phoenix rise from ashes?
or is it just wishful mythology,
All the king's horses and all the king's men,
not even super glue, can hold yesterday together, again
"a sliver of thread
of a dream joined
the stream
looking for a current" --
tears of joy
tears of sorrow
one river
One love
Beautiful poetry
A phoenix for a poet
RS
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A neat collection of notable thoughts, albeit sad and meloncholy, the sentiments are filled with regret's flawed but poetic ash, best wishes, love Dolly x
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A neat collection of notable thoughts, albeit sad and meloncholy, the sentiments are filled with regret's flawed but poetic ash, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from country ranch writer
Ashes are just that ashes. Blown away by the wind in a blink of an eye for one reason or another it happens. Fires burn the go out what do you have ashes.n
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Ashes are just that ashes. Blown away by the wind in a blink of an eye for one reason or another it happens. Fires burn the go out what do you have ashes.n
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Michael
These poems were truly wonderful, a lovely density of sound, a subtlety of imagery, and a surreal connection of visions through a musical journey of ashes.
Excellent patterns of resonance are used to create just the right amount of language to set this amazing scene through four brilliant writes.
Mitchell
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Hi Michael
These poems were truly wonderful, a lovely density of sound, a subtlety of imagery, and a surreal connection of visions through a musical journey of ashes.
Excellent patterns of resonance are used to create just the right amount of language to set this amazing scene through four brilliant writes.
Mitchell
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an amazing grouping, well constructed in its free flow and superb rhyme, - I read them more than once - I loved each verse - thank you for a stimulating and inspired read...
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In my opinion, an amazing grouping, well constructed in its free flow and superb rhyme, - I read them more than once - I loved each verse - thank you for a stimulating and inspired read...
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
Comment from Caressa_08
An attractive poem with great imagery that is not the happiest though it does happen...be it a break up or a forever one, the ashes...those remnants left after a relationship...Really don't think it was about a cremation of a loved one. When thinking of ashes, though yes, it did enter my mind, and mascara, which made your free verse a bit livelier, making me smile about that...Yes, it can be pretty heavy looking ash on some women or those who taking a liking to highlight or distract from one's looks, depending just how it is applied...& in this day & age, for those who are trans gender ( maybe they actually do a better job with their makeup to fool us all) ...And ciggies, well, they are the #1 ash that really is worse than anything ....Hubby was a smoker for so many decades & can't do that anymore with his recent heart attack & COPD & asthma & now lives with so many breathing devices, inhalers & RX's with all the ash he inhaled, he is very lucky. to still be alive, and just 1 clogged heart artery that needed a stent, after the big HA & an almost stroke was aborted with what they call, TPI administered with an IV the second day of his hospital stay...Though being he was so very active & just retired from many careers since he started working as a teen... think it could of been a lot worse).....And am so Thankful he still is here with me...the love of my life.
Best wishes for your entry & God Bless....C.
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An attractive poem with great imagery that is not the happiest though it does happen...be it a break up or a forever one, the ashes...those remnants left after a relationship...Really don't think it was about a cremation of a loved one. When thinking of ashes, though yes, it did enter my mind, and mascara, which made your free verse a bit livelier, making me smile about that...Yes, it can be pretty heavy looking ash on some women or those who taking a liking to highlight or distract from one's looks, depending just how it is applied...& in this day & age, for those who are trans gender ( maybe they actually do a better job with their makeup to fool us all) ...And ciggies, well, they are the #1 ash that really is worse than anything ....Hubby was a smoker for so many decades & can't do that anymore with his recent heart attack & COPD & asthma & now lives with so many breathing devices, inhalers & RX's with all the ash he inhaled, he is very lucky. to still be alive, and just 1 clogged heart artery that needed a stent, after the big HA & an almost stroke was aborted with what they call, TPI administered with an IV the second day of his hospital stay...Though being he was so very active & just retired from many careers since he started working as a teen... think it could of been a lot worse).....And am so Thankful he still is here with me...the love of my life.
Best wishes for your entry & God Bless....C.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
