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Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Witnesses' is a GREAT script.
It's a MUST READ!
I enjoyed reading it.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Outstanding artwork: The image shown fits the script perfectly.
Thanks for sharing your script.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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'Witnesses' is a GREAT script.
It's a MUST READ!
I enjoyed reading it.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Outstanding artwork: The image shown fits the script perfectly.
Thanks for sharing your script.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your descriptions has me laughing. I am completely worn out right now, so I am not sure I got everything you put into this post, but I enjoyed reading.
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Your descriptions has me laughing. I am completely worn out right now, so I am not sure I got everything you put into this post, but I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I think you have a great future as a playwright, Mikey, even though this is a little way out for me, but it's exactly what was asked for, and some of your characters are fantastic, Giddy
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I think you have a great future as a playwright, Mikey, even though this is a little way out for me, but it's exactly what was asked for, and some of your characters are fantastic, Giddy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from frierajac
This one is a scream. although I can't figue out who it is you are describing, that's probably because of my age and dis-
appreciation for rap. Very entertaining somehow.
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This one is a scream. although I can't figue out who it is you are describing, that's probably because of my age and dis-
appreciation for rap. Very entertaining somehow.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Wowee. This is totally crazy you, but I think I actually get this one. The surface point is obvious and true, but, yes, we are so damn prejudice that not much of what we say is not terribly tainted. You are exaggerating for effect, but the truth of this hits me. Who is the idiot that tells these kids they are not the same? NG
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Wowee. This is totally crazy you, but I think I actually get this one. The surface point is obvious and true, but, yes, we are so damn prejudice that not much of what we say is not terribly tainted. You are exaggerating for effect, but the truth of this hits me. Who is the idiot that tells these kids they are not the same? NG
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from apky
>>howls of pain, shrieks of attack and ravaging until a cloud drifts slowly by and the light of the moon reveals an empty alley and silence reigns save for the soft dripping of dew condensed on the eaves of old high rise tenements. All are asleep.<<
Yup, this definitely was a steamy sensuous dance, all the way to the silence that finally reigns to usher in sleep!
>>They were either were carried away to some hideous fate or they skipped to m'lou my darlin' << one "were" too many.
Again, another read I enjoyed, thanks.
- Apky
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>>howls of pain, shrieks of attack and ravaging until a cloud drifts slowly by and the light of the moon reveals an empty alley and silence reigns save for the soft dripping of dew condensed on the eaves of old high rise tenements. All are asleep.<<
Yup, this definitely was a steamy sensuous dance, all the way to the silence that finally reigns to usher in sleep!
>>They were either were carried away to some hideous fate or they skipped to m'lou my darlin' << one "were" too many.
Again, another read I enjoyed, thanks.
- Apky
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from Sasha
I sort of got lost on this one. I should have read your notes firs. Yes, witness accounts are varied, to say the least. You can take ten people, line them up and have them watch a planned car crash. Each witness describes a completely different scene. It has been proven that eye witness testimony is the least reliable of all. Great work with this one, I think you made your point very well.
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I sort of got lost on this one. I should have read your notes firs. Yes, witness accounts are varied, to say the least. You can take ten people, line them up and have them watch a planned car crash. Each witness describes a completely different scene. It has been proven that eye witness testimony is the least reliable of all. Great work with this one, I think you made your point very well.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
typo -They were either were carried away - one too many were's I think.
You've certainly got some interesting descriptions going on here mikey and different versions of the same dance or was that mugging. I really liked Frigeeeeed - I got a good image of her as I was reading this. Well done
cheers,
valda
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typo -They were either were carried away - one too many were's I think.
You've certainly got some interesting descriptions going on here mikey and different versions of the same dance or was that mugging. I really liked Frigeeeeed - I got a good image of her as I was reading this. Well done
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written prose describing two people involved in a crime that took place. Many witnesses, each have their own perspective of who was involved and what they were doing.
They (were) either were carried away to some {either one of the 'were' can be deleted}
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A very well-written prose describing two people involved in a crime that took place. Many witnesses, each have their own perspective of who was involved and what they were doing.
They (were) either were carried away to some {either one of the 'were' can be deleted}
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
Comment from Sankey
Yes you did, but normal for you. Hope you check my stuff out. Still adding things. How do I remove a Midi file in Additional features? I want to move it to another chapter. No spags, shock horror!
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Yes you did, but normal for you. Hope you check my stuff out. Still adding things. How do I remove a Midi file in Additional features? I want to move it to another chapter. No spags, shock horror!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017