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Comment from RazorFace
Very nice script. The minuet in G ties the whole story together. A life time from the hand point of view. Good luck in the contest, I believe you have a very strong entry :).
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Very nice script. The minuet in G ties the whole story together. A life time from the hand point of view. Good luck in the contest, I believe you have a very strong entry :).
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Michel
I'm so glad I sopped by and read you script about his little hands as the boy grows up each scene of your play has a very important message of kindness..
Gert
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Hello Michel
I'm so glad I sopped by and read you script about his little hands as the boy grows up each scene of your play has a very important message of kindness..
Gert
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
Comment from Bootsiepearl
Michael,
I am sitting here at work caught up on all my work. All I hear in the background is pecks and clicks from others working on their computer (in an office I don't feel at home in). After reading this I almost feel the need to step around the corner or in the bathroom. The work of yours has almost made me feel like crying my eyes out as I can relate to the words you express. Every detail has captured me. Sir, I recently found FanStory and started writing. I've always been a good story teller but not so good writer. (punctuation-grammatical correct use). Well, I am a great writer when I read how I am trying to say it. I'm learning though and working on getting internet at my house. The past few years I have been working with my hands and the sweat of my back. I traveled a lot of places, and met a lot of faces searching for what I was put on this earth to do. Going home never felt like home because I felt as if I was on a quest. I love home and I am home now but the past few months God has been telling me in small ways that I should have no regrets and go after screenwriting. I know you don't know me and I'm not asking for anything. I simply had to reach out to you beyond telling you what a miraculous piece you have written. It is beyond that. It touched me, gave me chills, and made me feel an overwhelming peace in my heart. God bless you. It is amazing what we do with our hands through out our entire lives. Sometimes it truly is the smallest things in life that can make your life. I never truly attempted to write like I do now. I never thought writing could make me feel free. When we are in love we feel as if we are free. I am in love with attempting to make my stories come to life. Thank you so very much for writing this. I know today I was meant to see your story, to reach out to you. I occasionally read these (which I should do more), but I skipped the one before yours. Wow, thank you. You are talented and fully equipped with a powerful devotion to speak to others. Hope you have a great day sir. God Bless you.
Alexandria
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Michael,
I am sitting here at work caught up on all my work. All I hear in the background is pecks and clicks from others working on their computer (in an office I don't feel at home in). After reading this I almost feel the need to step around the corner or in the bathroom. The work of yours has almost made me feel like crying my eyes out as I can relate to the words you express. Every detail has captured me. Sir, I recently found FanStory and started writing. I've always been a good story teller but not so good writer. (punctuation-grammatical correct use). Well, I am a great writer when I read how I am trying to say it. I'm learning though and working on getting internet at my house. The past few years I have been working with my hands and the sweat of my back. I traveled a lot of places, and met a lot of faces searching for what I was put on this earth to do. Going home never felt like home because I felt as if I was on a quest. I love home and I am home now but the past few months God has been telling me in small ways that I should have no regrets and go after screenwriting. I know you don't know me and I'm not asking for anything. I simply had to reach out to you beyond telling you what a miraculous piece you have written. It is beyond that. It touched me, gave me chills, and made me feel an overwhelming peace in my heart. God bless you. It is amazing what we do with our hands through out our entire lives. Sometimes it truly is the smallest things in life that can make your life. I never truly attempted to write like I do now. I never thought writing could make me feel free. When we are in love we feel as if we are free. I am in love with attempting to make my stories come to life. Thank you so very much for writing this. I know today I was meant to see your story, to reach out to you. I occasionally read these (which I should do more), but I skipped the one before yours. Wow, thank you. You are talented and fully equipped with a powerful devotion to speak to others. Hope you have a great day sir. God Bless you.
Alexandria
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Michael,
This is superb. I love the story of the hands throughout time. Each instance is so thought out & detailed in writing. I can picture each one because of the attention to detail & word choice.
Thank you for sharing an great story. Jan
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Michael,
This is superb. I love the story of the hands throughout time. Each instance is so thought out & detailed in writing. I can picture each one because of the attention to detail & word choice.
Thank you for sharing an great story. Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Michael,
Must have missed this first time around so good job it was in the 'story of the month' or I'd have missed it completely. This is a superb piece of writing.
I like the whole concept from start to finish and the execution of the piece is superb. I'm sure what medium this would best be delivered in, probably a short television piece, although I could see it being cleverly performed as a short play using a screen for the close-ups of the hands.
It's a very measured piece and takes the reader/audience on a scatter-shot, yet still linear journey. the link with hands close-up and voiceover is an excellent device, but it is the emotion that comes through in voiceover section, asking those questions that gives this a real emotional / dramatic weight.
Super piece and I genuinely hope this takes the story of the month prize. One of the best and moving pieces I've read for some considerable time on this site and in the other groups I'm a member of.
All the best
G
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Hi Michael,
Must have missed this first time around so good job it was in the 'story of the month' or I'd have missed it completely. This is a superb piece of writing.
I like the whole concept from start to finish and the execution of the piece is superb. I'm sure what medium this would best be delivered in, probably a short television piece, although I could see it being cleverly performed as a short play using a screen for the close-ups of the hands.
It's a very measured piece and takes the reader/audience on a scatter-shot, yet still linear journey. the link with hands close-up and voiceover is an excellent device, but it is the emotion that comes through in voiceover section, asking those questions that gives this a real emotional / dramatic weight.
Super piece and I genuinely hope this takes the story of the month prize. One of the best and moving pieces I've read for some considerable time on this site and in the other groups I'm a member of.
All the best
G
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
Comment from seaglass
This is well written. There's no errors. I can picture it in film. One man's life is told through the experiences of his hands. The point well made that others can't chose our destiny.
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This is well written. There's no errors. I can picture it in film. One man's life is told through the experiences of his hands. The point well made that others can't chose our destiny.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
If you hadn't included the topic in your author notes, I would never have guessed this was about hands. HA. Super job with this Mav. I can see this working very well into a series of hands on a stage with the theme developing through different hands.
Exceptional in every way. Thank you for sharing.
Ange
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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If you hadn't included the topic in your author notes, I would never have guessed this was about hands. HA. Super job with this Mav. I can see this working very well into a series of hands on a stage with the theme developing through different hands.
Exceptional in every way. Thank you for sharing.
Ange
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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You're too sweet, Ange. I like the idea here. I'm not thrilled with my rendition, but I'm glad you seem to see it the same way as a stage piece or maybe a short film featuring various hands.
Still trying to figure out what a script is. LOL
Thanks a million!
Mav
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mike. Excellent job on this little peek into life. I like the way you carried the reader through life by way of the hands. The narrative is very effective too. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Hi, Mike. Excellent job on this little peek into life. I like the way you carried the reader through life by way of the hands. The narrative is very effective too. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much, Bob
A little idea that kind of worked for once. I'm so delighted you enjoyed it. :)) mikey
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Hi, Mikey. If you ever have time I'd appreciate your take on a chapter from my book (postings) Thanks, Bob
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I must admit I was hoping your 'hands' write would be a musical story and I like the way you have done this from scene to scene from the little hands to the large, aged hands, still playing the piano. Well done, enjoyed it mikey.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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I must admit I was hoping your 'hands' write would be a musical story and I like the way you have done this from scene to scene from the little hands to the large, aged hands, still playing the piano. Well done, enjoyed it mikey.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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I did have music in the back of my mind. I may work on it some more. I'm thrilled you like the idea. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from frierajac
I like the sentiment expressed and the clarity. It just borders on being excruciatingly real. There is a distance that seems to make the brutality tolerable.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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I like the sentiment expressed and the clarity. It just borders on being excruciatingly real. There is a distance that seems to make the brutality tolerable.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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It is real actually. I'm delighted you like the premise. It did come out somewhat the way I envisioned, so I'm happy. I'll take a look at again in a month or so. Thanks for the great input. mikey