MarBear Versus the Volcano Part 2
What is black and blue all over and sports a concussion?21 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Mary,
You write in a fun sarcastic style which makes for great reading. My wife and I did the ride and had a good time until she ran off the road. It was near the top and she got back on and finished the ride.
Earlier, before the ride began, I had taken my camera to get a picture of the sun coming up over the lip of the volcano. Unfortunately, I failed to check to see how many pictures I had left to take. I got one of my wife at the summit, but on the next shot of the sunrise I ran out of film. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Dear Mary,
You write in a fun sarcastic style which makes for great reading. My wife and I did the ride and had a good time until she ran off the road. It was near the top and she got back on and finished the ride.
Earlier, before the ride began, I had taken my camera to get a picture of the sun coming up over the lip of the volcano. Unfortunately, I failed to check to see how many pictures I had left to take. I got one of my wife at the summit, but on the next shot of the sunrise I ran out of film. (LOL)
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there Winslow, thank you so much for your wonderful review and six star rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your review. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse the lateness in responding to your wonderful review. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review your work too. Good for your wife. I crashed at mile 27; with one mile to go. :/ That's the great thing about phone cameras nowadays...you only have to worry about your battery being charged!
Comment from kriver
Hi,
This sure is funny all you needed is a murder plot or S Plum and Ranger to show up to save you. I hope your BO care is paid up course you might have to pay 30k 1st. But what the hey it's only money and some body parts you don't really need. Broken arms legs neck. Maybe you and
Bruni figured that after the ride you would need a quite stay in an expensive hospital room to recoup from your downhill adventure and a head exam. You saw the stats 33 1/3% chance of survivable crippling cash injuries vs 66 2/3%
chance of dying. That's not such bad odds your guaranteed to win a broken something or other. Maybe your husband wanted a divorce but didn't want to pay for it and was hoping for the best.
A quick accident that paid double for death. Hey his chances were pretty good. Obviously, I am kidding and having fun with it.
Over all it is a very good write.
On the order of SP.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi,
This sure is funny all you needed is a murder plot or S Plum and Ranger to show up to save you. I hope your BO care is paid up course you might have to pay 30k 1st. But what the hey it's only money and some body parts you don't really need. Broken arms legs neck. Maybe you and
Bruni figured that after the ride you would need a quite stay in an expensive hospital room to recoup from your downhill adventure and a head exam. You saw the stats 33 1/3% chance of survivable crippling cash injuries vs 66 2/3%
chance of dying. That's not such bad odds your guaranteed to win a broken something or other. Maybe your husband wanted a divorce but didn't want to pay for it and was hoping for the best.
A quick accident that paid double for death. Hey his chances were pretty good. Obviously, I am kidding and having fun with it.
Over all it is a very good write.
On the order of SP.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there Kriver, thank you so much for your amazing review and six star rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your kind words. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I see you are a Janet Evanovich fan as well :D Love her stories. Thank you again!
Comment from mvbrooks
Fascinating story with a relatable, descriptive narrator and her alter-ego. The descriptions are strong and make the reader feel as if she were watching the action take place. The ending point is a positive cliff-hanger making the reader want to read on.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Fascinating story with a relatable, descriptive narrator and her alter-ego. The descriptions are strong and make the reader feel as if she were watching the action take place. The ending point is a positive cliff-hanger making the reader want to read on.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your review. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your review. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from Dawn Munro
"...(on) a banana seat..."
"...(were) checked in...)
I await the next part to this story with something wriggling around in my stomach (and it is not a butterfly). Had I read this BEFORE you actually set out on this trip, Brunhilda would have sounded like the GOOD witch; actually, more like a guardian angel or a fairy godmommy. My protest might have been something like: "ARE YOU NUTS?!!!" (LOL)
Then, of course, there's that little devil in me who would be saying, "Aw, come on. It's just a bike ride - how bad can it be?" *grin*
(See what your story inspires...:))
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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"...(on) a banana seat..."
"...(were) checked in...)
I await the next part to this story with something wriggling around in my stomach (and it is not a butterfly). Had I read this BEFORE you actually set out on this trip, Brunhilda would have sounded like the GOOD witch; actually, more like a guardian angel or a fairy godmommy. My protest might have been something like: "ARE YOU NUTS?!!!" (LOL)
Then, of course, there's that little devil in me who would be saying, "Aw, come on. It's just a bike ride - how bad can it be?" *grin*
(See what your story inspires...:))
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Dawn, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your review. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your review. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D Thank you for the catches too!
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Oh! What fun, Mary! Not to worry at all! :)
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mary. You have the most wonderful sense of humor that you use in your writing. The ike ride and fall was hilarious. I have been to Hawaii twice. Once for ten days and we did all theislands except Naghui or whatever that one is that is strictly Hawaiins occupying it. I never took a bike ride and now I'm sort of glad I did not. I saw the volcanoes from a helicopter...that was fine. LOL.
Good job on this, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi, Mary. You have the most wonderful sense of humor that you use in your writing. The ike ride and fall was hilarious. I have been to Hawaii twice. Once for ten days and we did all theislands except Naghui or whatever that one is that is strictly Hawaiins occupying it. I never took a bike ride and now I'm sort of glad I did not. I saw the volcanoes from a helicopter...that was fine. LOL.
Good job on this, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Bob, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here on FanStory. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your efforts. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
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Congratulations on the new arrival on the way. :) Bob
Comment from emptypage
Great installment of this story. I loved the close, with Bruni threatening to crap herself...made me LOL.
"...spritzed White Shoulders cologne on my white shoulders...."<<< funny.
"a worse case scenario" <<< should read "WORST case scenario." A worst-case scenario is characterized by the worst of the possible foreseeable circumstances. It is the most extreme scenario.
"It contained the two-wheelers with disc brakes the size of Texas, and helmets to protect our brains, you know, the ones that agreed to the insanity--"<
Can't wait for the finish (especially now that I'm awake and understand what you are doing).
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Great installment of this story. I loved the close, with Bruni threatening to crap herself...made me LOL.
"...spritzed White Shoulders cologne on my white shoulders...."<<< funny.
"a worse case scenario" <<< should read "WORST case scenario." A worst-case scenario is characterized by the worst of the possible foreseeable circumstances. It is the most extreme scenario.
"It contained the two-wheelers with disc brakes the size of Texas, and helmets to protect our brains, you know, the ones that agreed to the insanity--"<
Can't wait for the finish (especially now that I'm awake and understand what you are doing).
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Marla, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your review. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your effort. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D I'm still awaiting your friend request... :D
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
I know of no other author here who consistently gives their readers belly-laughs after belly-laughs. The images that you create for your reader and Bruni's snide remarks are just too funny for words, Mary.
Highlights of this write pour moi:
- "I was promised a beer and a quesadilla for my participation" ... lol ... the reader wonders what you might do for a steak.
- Brunhilda's reminder of the hefty funeral costs
- "snarling like a pissed off badger" ... great comparison
- "Brunhilda suggested I throw another prayer to Pele the Fire Goddess
-"Brunhilda hoped they had a helmet to fit the size of my pinhead" ... this had me laughing out loud ... your self-deprecating really helps endear the reader to you and your situation
- "Brunhilda's head was spinning -- she even threatened shitting my pants for the experience, but went with her usual -- fainting" ... terrifically funny!
Luved it all!
Connie
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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I know of no other author here who consistently gives their readers belly-laughs after belly-laughs. The images that you create for your reader and Bruni's snide remarks are just too funny for words, Mary.
Highlights of this write pour moi:
- "I was promised a beer and a quesadilla for my participation" ... lol ... the reader wonders what you might do for a steak.
- Brunhilda's reminder of the hefty funeral costs
- "snarling like a pissed off badger" ... great comparison
- "Brunhilda suggested I throw another prayer to Pele the Fire Goddess
-"Brunhilda hoped they had a helmet to fit the size of my pinhead" ... this had me laughing out loud ... your self-deprecating really helps endear the reader to you and your situation
- "Brunhilda's head was spinning -- she even threatened shitting my pants for the experience, but went with her usual -- fainting" ... terrifically funny!
Luved it all!
Connie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Connie, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's BaBy-Q for this Saturday, for over a hundred people, and have fallen way behind here. (It's that balance thing you spoke of...)
Please excuse my lateness in responding. I loved reading your review and your reactions. My favorite...one wonders what you would do for a steak! LOL. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Thank you, friend, you are so very appreciated. XO
Comment from Ric Myworld
Of course, being a member of the sixty-plus set, all I can see is that character of my age-group's admiration wobbling around in circles, saying, "Danger, danger, Will Robinson." Knowing damn well that I wouldn't have paid him any mind then, anymore than, I would have expected you to at that moment. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Of course, being a member of the sixty-plus set, all I can see is that character of my age-group's admiration wobbling around in circles, saying, "Danger, danger, Will Robinson." Knowing damn well that I wouldn't have paid him any mind then, anymore than, I would have expected you to at that moment. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Ric, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort.I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mary, a fun read and I would say I would never attempt to do what you're about to do. Not even for 150 dollars. No way, Jose. Looking forward to the next part. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi Mary, a fun read and I would say I would never attempt to do what you're about to do. Not even for 150 dollars. No way, Jose. Looking forward to the next part. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Ulla, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your effort. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
Comment from Sasha
You haven't even gotten on the bike yet and I am amazed you survived and were able to write about this terrible, crazy, insane ride down into a volcano. I cannot wait to read the next part. No way in hell, could you pay me to take this tour. Do they still have it? Your humor is awesome and I love your writing. Keep up the good work and stay the hell out of volcanoes!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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You haven't even gotten on the bike yet and I am amazed you survived and were able to write about this terrible, crazy, insane ride down into a volcano. I cannot wait to read the next part. No way in hell, could you pay me to take this tour. Do they still have it? Your humor is awesome and I love your writing. Keep up the good work and stay the hell out of volcanoes!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Hi there, Sasha, thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating. I am so sorry for the delay in acknowledging your effort. I have been crazy busy planning my daughter's baby shower for this Saturday, and have fallen way behind here. Please excuse my lateness in responding to your review. Come next week, I will be in a much better place to write and review again. I hope to get the finale up by mid-week, if all goes well :D
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Relax and enjoy your daughter's baby shower. There is no hurry, we will all be hear when the dust settles.