Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Gybe Ho!"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A nice piece for the contest. And you used it to explain life just as well. I don't know if I would have capitolized the words but I am not familiar with the tanka to know how to do that. 5-7-5-7-7-is spot on
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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A nice piece for the contest. And you used it to explain life just as well. I don't know if I would have capitolized the words but I am not familiar with the tanka to know how to do that. 5-7-5-7-7-is spot on
Comment Written 11-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Good point, Barb. I don't know either. The examples on the links in the contest description show both ways. I don't know if they're truly representative, though. Considering that the original Japanese has no capitalization, I guess it's open to interpretation.
Comment from winnona
A well-written tanka contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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A well-written tanka contest entry. Your words flowed well line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you, winnona.
Comment from persevere
Your sailing analogy to sudden changes we have to make in life is interesting and apt. As a part time sailor myself the 'ready about' command required instant adjustment.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Your sailing analogy to sudden changes we have to make in life is interesting and apt. As a part time sailor myself the 'ready about' command required instant adjustment.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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LOL! Nice to have another sailor reading my work. Thank you.