The Impossible Dream
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Comment from I am Cat
wow, this is powerfully done, Lance,
I find that emotional poetry, without getting sappy,
is a very wonderful technique and grabs the reader.
Many can really taste the pain.
Well done and congratulations on your honorable mention.
Cat
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
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wow, this is powerfully done, Lance,
I find that emotional poetry, without getting sappy,
is a very wonderful technique and grabs the reader.
Many can really taste the pain.
Well done and congratulations on your honorable mention.
Cat
Comment Written 14-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
Thank you very much.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Really all you need to do is make her feel like she's the center of your world. Us women aren't that complicated. Give us attention, cook for us, tell us we're beautiful everyday, and buy us something special where we're having a bad day. It doesn't even have to cost a lot. Just the fact that you went out of your way, that's what we love. Hang onto her and know how blessed you both are :)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Really all you need to do is make her feel like she's the center of your world. Us women aren't that complicated. Give us attention, cook for us, tell us we're beautiful everyday, and buy us something special where we're having a bad day. It doesn't even have to cost a lot. Just the fact that you went out of your way, that's what we love. Hang onto her and know how blessed you both are :)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much. LOL. Oh, is that all.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Lance,
This is such a beautiful presentation. I love the etheree form. Each succinct syllable must be chosen with precision for the greatest impact. How wonderful that she makes you want to be more than you are.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Hi Lance,
This is such a beautiful presentation. I love the etheree form. Each succinct syllable must be chosen with precision for the greatest impact. How wonderful that she makes you want to be more than you are.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much, Kim.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent Etheree Poem format. The romantic mood is sustained all through the poem. "Seizing my soul" is a lovely phrase. You really show the gal's impact on the narrator. She has captivated him and is an angel of grace in his eyes. She is literally the sun and moon to him. If she surpasses being a mortal, the narrator wishes the same were true of him. But he is stuck in reality. Very beautiful and appropriate wording. judi
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Excellent Etheree Poem format. The romantic mood is sustained all through the poem. "Seizing my soul" is a lovely phrase. You really show the gal's impact on the narrator. She has captivated him and is an angel of grace in his eyes. She is literally the sun and moon to him. If she surpasses being a mortal, the narrator wishes the same were true of him. But he is stuck in reality. Very beautiful and appropriate wording. judi
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much, Judi.Thank you very much
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You're very welcome. Loved your poem. judi
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is lovely Lance. Both the presentation and the
sentiment of admiring someone that you know can never be
yours, but when she is near the whole world stops and
you can marvel in her beauty and grace. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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This is lovely Lance. Both the presentation and the
sentiment of admiring someone that you know can never be
yours, but when she is near the whole world stops and
you can marvel in her beauty and grace. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Halfree
Torn between 4 and five, but settled on five after a day's break. Came back today and reread. Very subtle,this poem. After a second cup of coffee, read it again and something clicked...do not ask what.
Finished my coffee and paused, fingers resting on the keyboard...it's a fiver for sure.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Torn between 4 and five, but settled on five after a day's break. Came back today and reread. Very subtle,this poem. After a second cup of coffee, read it again and something clicked...do not ask what.
Finished my coffee and paused, fingers resting on the keyboard...it's a fiver for sure.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from sanejane
Magical words and glittering presentation. The etheree form is ideal for romantic poetry, and you've made a beautiful job of this one about an unreachable woman.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Magical words and glittering presentation. The etheree form is ideal for romantic poetry, and you've made a beautiful job of this one about an unreachable woman.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from papa55mike
First thing, I love how you set this poem up. The words beside the picture, awesome. Second thing, the eyes in the picture haunt you and you can feel it in the words! Third thing, This is the total package!
Good luck in the contest, like you need it!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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First thing, I love how you set this poem up. The words beside the picture, awesome. Second thing, the eyes in the picture haunt you and you can feel it in the words! Third thing, This is the total package!
Good luck in the contest, like you need it!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Joy Graham
Excellent etheree that has a perfect shape :) The angel in the picture looks like Angela Jolie to me. I love that you put the poem on the picture. The stars of the picture are dazzling. This is a lovely presentation that wraps up your contest entry like a beautiful white bow :) Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Excellent etheree that has a perfect shape :) The angel in the picture looks like Angela Jolie to me. I love that you put the poem on the picture. The stars of the picture are dazzling. This is a lovely presentation that wraps up your contest entry like a beautiful white bow :) Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much
Comment from Writer51
Very original and lovely. I really like the way you integrated the poem into the photo. It gives it a lot of style which adds strength to the easy flowing words. The poem itself have been done in very crafty words. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Very original and lovely. I really like the way you integrated the poem into the photo. It gives it a lot of style which adds strength to the easy flowing words. The poem itself have been done in very crafty words. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much