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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Right then! That was a quickie marriage and a quicker ending! So off he goes on honeymoon, with some pretty braceletts and a sting! Lol. Another nice little one, Bill, well done! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2022

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
    Thank you, Sandra. He seemed a bit touched.
Comment from nomi338
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Wow! I did not see that coming. You are quite the writer for surprises. As surprises go, this one pretty much takes the cake. I guess that not every body is good for anybody, certainly not everybody. The wedding night is not the ideal time to find out that you married a murderer.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2016
    Thank you, nomi, for the review. Bill
Comment from janalma
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A really chilly wedding reception. I think I don't much like Caleb. Very graphic flash fiction. You said a lot with few words. Well written, a murder most foul.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thank you, Janalma, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from Teri7
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This was a very interesting flash fiction story you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Teri

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thank you, Teri, for reviewing. Bill
Comment from Dustybones
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Good and tight for such a short story. It takes real talent to wrap things up and still make a posting worth the read. Later, dustybones

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thank you, DB, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Thomas Bowling
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Just like my honey moon. I don't see the problem here. Except where are the rhymes? Don't you usually write poetry? I'm glad to see some prose thrown in there.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Mine too. The police were actually in-laws, but heir reaction was similar.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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LOL! This is bizarre, weird, strange, and sick. Don't know what to make of it, but it looks like the cops all had a good time arresting him. :)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thank you, Phyllis, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from DonandVicki
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It sounds like a serial killer got his honeymoon. A very good and evil story that quickly opened the imagination. Well done on this quick flash.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016
    Thank you, D&V, for the excellent review. Bill