senryu (feel of the spring sun)
5-7-5 contest45 total reviews
Comment from Kazzawin
You've captured the feelings of spring rebirth with this lovely contest entry.
I particularly like the word 'hibernating' as our minds and bodies are often sluggish and grey by winters end, especially if it has been a cruel one.
The sun peaking through those early spring mornings is always welcoming.
Good luck in the contest : )
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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You've captured the feelings of spring rebirth with this lovely contest entry.
I particularly like the word 'hibernating' as our minds and bodies are often sluggish and grey by winters end, especially if it has been a cruel one.
The sun peaking through those early spring mornings is always welcoming.
Good luck in the contest : )
Comment Written 12-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Kazzawin, for this wonderful review for my poem. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and I truly appreciate your mentioning you liked the image in the word hibernating. Thank you for your kind words and response.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from joannakruk
Yes, the ultimate catalyst in wakening from hibernation mode. Unfortunately here in Australia we are entering the winter months. It's a sad state of affairs as the beautiful flowers curl up, the days shorten and the tumultuous weather hits. Thank you for sharing.
Jo
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Yes, the ultimate catalyst in wakening from hibernation mode. Unfortunately here in Australia we are entering the winter months. It's a sad state of affairs as the beautiful flowers curl up, the days shorten and the tumultuous weather hits. Thank you for sharing.
Jo
Comment Written 12-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Joanna, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your encouraging comments..
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
What a great poem for coming out of an Indiana winter. In keeping with the requirement of the 5-7-5, you have perfectly captured the springtime after the thaw. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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What a great poem for coming out of an Indiana winter. In keeping with the requirement of the 5-7-5, you have perfectly captured the springtime after the thaw. Nicely done.
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Mary, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Exactly! This is excellent. That warm sun after a long winter does feel like it's bringing us back from a deep, long sleep, or maybe even a coma. (LOL) It's my favorite time of year, and your little gem describes the thaw. :))
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Exactly! This is excellent. That warm sun after a long winter does feel like it's bringing us back from a deep, long sleep, or maybe even a coma. (LOL) It's my favorite time of year, and your little gem describes the thaw. :))
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Dawn, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Leineco
Oh my, yes, there is something almost mystical about
Spring sunlight. . . the way it breaks Winter's hold on
us!!
Summer sun implores "luxuriate", but Springtime's sun
invigorates. . .begs us, "Please, come out and play" :-)
Nicely done Indi :-)
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Oh my, yes, there is something almost mystical about
Spring sunlight. . . the way it breaks Winter's hold on
us!!
Summer sun implores "luxuriate", but Springtime's sun
invigorates. . .begs us, "Please, come out and play" :-)
Nicely done Indi :-)
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Leineco, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your thoughts and encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Taffspride
'feel of the spring sun.' Oh the visions these few words conjured up. Sunny carefree days, time to potter in the garden, time to walk along the beach and enjoy the sound of the ocean. Lazy warm afternoons sipping iced tea.
such a well written 5-7-5
Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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'feel of the spring sun.' Oh the visions these few words conjured up. Sunny carefree days, time to potter in the garden, time to walk along the beach and enjoy the sound of the ocean. Lazy warm afternoons sipping iced tea.
such a well written 5-7-5
Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Ann, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Briergate
It's nearly summer oh yeah! This is a super-sweet Haiku, using the traditional nature theme in a lovely way. How many of us feel the same, that when those first warm rays hit our faces, we uncoil and come alive again? I really like this.
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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It's nearly summer oh yeah! This is a super-sweet Haiku, using the traditional nature theme in a lovely way. How many of us feel the same, that when those first warm rays hit our faces, we uncoil and come alive again? I really like this.
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, BriergTe, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Oh! How true.
Clever use of 14 words to deliver a gem.
As an Aussie embraced by autumn and beckoned
by winter this sounds so enticing.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Oh! How true.
Clever use of 14 words to deliver a gem.
As an Aussie embraced by autumn and beckoned
by winter this sounds so enticing.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, Shirley, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
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You are welcome.
:-)
Comment from VaV-VOOM
The Japanese have a great way with words do you agree? Haiku poetry is one of my favorite to read, as well as write. You have (in my opinion) written a beautiful poem. I am real glad I reviewed it, and thank you for sharing. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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The Japanese have a great way with words do you agree? Haiku poetry is one of my favorite to read, as well as write. You have (in my opinion) written a beautiful poem. I am real glad I reviewed it, and thank you for sharing. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 12-May-2016
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Thank you, VaV Voom, for taking the time to read and write a review for my poem. I appreciate your kind response and for sharing your kind thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from zanya
Oh yes indeed - is there a more revitalising time of year? - following our winter hibernation it takes the warmth of the 'spring sun ' to get us back into action again 'back to life'.
reply by the author on 10-May-2016
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Oh yes indeed - is there a more revitalising time of year? - following our winter hibernation it takes the warmth of the 'spring sun ' to get us back into action again 'back to life'.
Comment Written 10-May-2016
reply by the author on 10-May-2016
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thank you for your wonderful review and taking the time to share your thoughts for my poem, zanya. I truly appreciate your kind words and I agree spring is so revitalizing! Thank you.