Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Great entry for the Love Poem Contest, I wish you luck. How many marriages stay as yours has over such a long time? Very blessed both of you are; ups and downs, smiles and frowns; still, love conquers all situations. Nicely done and a good contender for a win in the contest. Blessings, K.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Hi Kay. Thank you for those kind words and your generous review. The contest has been run and won, my friend. I didn't win, but did come second... Oh well, can't win them all!! Thanks again and miles of Tassie smiles... Marijke :o)

reply by Aussie on 16-Apr-2016

Marijke, You have only been back for 5mins! Go girl, go! Second place already. Congrats.

Comment from Dutchie

Exceptional

Such a sweei story (poem) My dear friend. You hear it often: young love, first love.
I think what you see is what you get at such a young age. You can be totally yourself. Very well written this sweet romance I loved it very much!!!! Fietje xxxxxx

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Hi again, Fietje, this time a real six stars, my friend. Thank you so much for those lovely stars and your comments and observations on this 'love story'. Warmest regards, and loads of love, Marijke :o) xxxxxx

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is a wonderful love poem. You really met that young.. You have spent almost all of your lives together. Congrats, my friend. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thanks Debbie, although written in the first person, this was about a couple of friends of ours - with some poetic licence! My husband and I didn't meet until we were 18! Soooooo old! We will have 50 years up next year! How is that? Thanks for your lovely and warm review, and warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Hi there,
This is a lovely and sweet poem of young love that endured time.
I so enjoyed the line... Kiss me again when I am a man..
I liked that and felt it was the pivotable line. She did kiss him and now they have been married for over 30 years.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from bbowen6757

Excellent

As always, beautifully written. I like the way you used the perspective of one of the players to tell the story. The artwork you selected was very fitting for the verse. Well done, enjoyed.

Bobby

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from pmait

Excellent

What a delightful, romantic piece. You should be able to get it published beyond FanStory. I met my wife when she was 17 and I was 18. I did not kiss her for a year after we started dating, not because I didn't want to, but because of a past rejection, and I didn't want her to reject me, too. We got married 3 years after that first kiss and have not stopped kissing for 49 more. Gee, your poem makes it all come back.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much pmait for your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Sandy P.

Excellent

Very 'sweet' poem! It is both nostalgic and tells a real story. Your rhymes are good and strong and your poem reads very well out loud. I can truly 'feel' the love come through each line. Nice job - I enjoyed this very much.
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 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem. It has good flow. I like the rhyme, too.

The story is told well in your verses.

Good job and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much jannypn for your kind and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

This is a tender and charming poem, Marijke. Your rhyme seems natural and unforced. The tempo is good so this flows nicely. It is a happy story

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you again, Douglas, for your kind and generous review on this 'charming poem' :o) Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

That was lovely Fiona. I don't write poetry but I like well written poems and that one was. It jollied along nicely and I had a silly grin on my face after I read it once I read it again. Well done. Regards Mabaker.

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 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for your kind and generous review, Mabaker. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)