Animated Stills
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Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
This photo is quite fun and truly amazing! I also see a bald-headed ogre-type individual holding the top of your phantom's head! hahahaha
1.) But will he show, this man of snow, (who's) hidden in the wall?
2.) Especially enjoyed the internal rhyming. Great job!!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Tom,
This photo is quite fun and truly amazing! I also see a bald-headed ogre-type individual holding the top of your phantom's head! hahahaha
1.) But will he show, this man of snow, (who's) hidden in the wall?
2.) Especially enjoyed the internal rhyming. Great job!!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Thank you Robyn. Glad you see things too. I''ll fix that.
Comment from robina1978
A beautiful photo by you that complements your poem perfectly. And yet an other new form for me: an animated still. I enjoyed your poem a lot. It rhymes all the way, and has quite a bit of eternal rhyme.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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A beautiful photo by you that complements your poem perfectly. And yet an other new form for me: an animated still. I enjoyed your poem a lot. It rhymes all the way, and has quite a bit of eternal rhyme.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
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Thank you Ine
Comment from Pantygynt
And a much larger figure high up left of cente with an arm cutting across the vertical at an angle and massive turban like thing on his head.
You could never get all this information over in fourteen lines of pentameter but the extra couple of feet in the heptameter make it all possible.
The longer lines make a certain amount of explanation possible. It is a bit like having a guide with you.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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And a much larger figure high up left of cente with an arm cutting across the vertical at an angle and massive turban like thing on his head.
You could never get all this information over in fourteen lines of pentameter but the extra couple of feet in the heptameter make it all possible.
The longer lines make a certain amount of explanation possible. It is a bit like having a guide with you.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, I see him too glad you could make it out.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Treischel,
I'd never heard of an Animated Still before, what a wonderful concept. I live in Alaska and am fortunate to be constantly surrounded by nature. Isn't it amazing what can be found if you only bother to look? Majestic, indeed.
Both internal and external rhyme in this make it an impeccable piece.
Excellent work!
Kim
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Hi Treischel,
I'd never heard of an Animated Still before, what a wonderful concept. I live in Alaska and am fortunate to be constantly surrounded by nature. Isn't it amazing what can be found if you only bother to look? Majestic, indeed.
Both internal and external rhyme in this make it an impeccable piece.
Excellent work!
Kim
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Kim. Alaska is a fabulous place.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes I can see all that. This is a game
we always played as children and I still
do, it gets to be a habit. That is quite
a picture Tom. Interesting. I would love
to see the real thing. LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Yes I can see all that. This is a game
we always played as children and I still
do, it gets to be a habit. That is quite
a picture Tom. Interesting. I would love
to see the real thing. LOL Nancy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Nancy. I am glad you liked that photo. It is an interesting spot.
Comment from His Grayness
This is truly DELIGHTFUL, really UNIQUE, Challenging, Ponderable, Whimsical and best of all HIGHLY EDUCATIONAL. From this brilliant poet and teacher! Wish I had ten stars for this one! Many thanks for the great education and 'mind trip". I love any form of abstract "visualization" HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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This is truly DELIGHTFUL, really UNIQUE, Challenging, Ponderable, Whimsical and best of all HIGHLY EDUCATIONAL. From this brilliant poet and teacher! Wish I had ten stars for this one! Many thanks for the great education and 'mind trip". I love any form of abstract "visualization" HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Vance. I appreciate your enthusiasm, comments, and especially the stars. You brightened my day. This is the first six I received all week, after posting 8 poems.
Comment from royowen
The funny thing is it read like several limericks rolled into one work, at least to my rhythmic imagination, not strict but you've stirred more than one angle. I was struggling to see images of people or forms, but then, I'm not good at picking those picture puzzles with 10 images in them anyway, my ineptitude is not your fault! But clever work, with eloquent wording and great imagination, my admiration, great rhyming Roy. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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The funny thing is it read like several limericks rolled into one work, at least to my rhythmic imagination, not strict but you've stirred more than one angle. I was struggling to see images of people or forms, but then, I'm not good at picking those picture puzzles with 10 images in them anyway, my ineptitude is not your fault! But clever work, with eloquent wording and great imagination, my admiration, great rhyming Roy. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Roy. Many people have difficulty that way. Including my wife. I appreciate you comments on the verse.
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Most welcome
Comment from CALLAHANMR
As I looked at the photograph, I was not surprised to see Dean Kush staring back at me. Soon I was engrossed by the life this Animated Still took on.
My imagination, always active where there's silence, took over as the crackle of ghostly images shifted without moving.
Great natural and supernatural poem.
Roger
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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As I looked at the photograph, I was not surprised to see Dean Kush staring back at me. Soon I was engrossed by the life this Animated Still took on.
My imagination, always active where there's silence, took over as the crackle of ghostly images shifted without moving.
Great natural and supernatural poem.
Roger
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Callahanmr. I had to laugh at your Dean comment.
Comment from ronnie k
This I a work of art, the accompanying picture was given the promised thousand words and like the photo your rhyme is a work well worth reading
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This I a work of art, the accompanying picture was given the promised thousand words and like the photo your rhyme is a work well worth reading
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you Ronnie for that wonderful compliment.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
I do see all the things you describe. It is an amazing photo. At first sight it looks like many people in white cloaks are gathered on the left side. The poem is a real ghostly story for a cold winters night.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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I do see all the things you describe. It is an amazing photo. At first sight it looks like many people in white cloaks are gathered on the left side. The poem is a real ghostly story for a cold winters night.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Shank you Sandra. I like that characterization of it.