Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi sweet girl, No!!!! I don't think this would be so easy...but I think I will try one...seems to be correct...I long to be in that same place...where I get that first kiss...sigh....very nicely written sweet one...Love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016

It's not very hard, you can do. Love ya back. Jo Lynn

reply by l.raven on 01-Feb-2016

Hi Jo Lynn, beautiful name...I will try...love.........xxoo

Comment from anabellapongasi

Excellent

This is a lovely romantic entry to the contest. Nicely voiced longings...memories of "the way we were" :)...Well executed iambic monometer. Best of luck in the contest.

Blessings,
Anabella

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Thank you so much I really appreciate your thoughts and thanks for the luck as well always need that

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Your poem is a lovely one, Dawn of Tomorrow.

It evokes sad feelings of a love lost through the fine imagery you've used.

I particularly like the ending,

"I long
to be ...."

Well done! Best of luck in the contest. Alana

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016

Oh thank you so much. Really appreciate your time.

reply by acerisestory on 31-Jan-2016

You are welcome! Alana

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A poem of longing to be with your loved one. Taking the reader to the street you first kissed. The only thing you want is to be with him.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016

thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I was not familiar with this form until the contest. I liked your interpretation and the reinforcing artwork you selected. (I believe "used to" lost its "d" about three fourths of the way down.) Your repeats are effective for emphasis. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016

oops thanks for that. Use/used I've always had trouble with that. Thanks so mch

reply by Joan E. on 30-Jan-2016

Thanks for your warmhearted response. I'm glad my review was helpful. Happy weekend- Joan

Comment from DragonSkulls

Excellent

Hey, Dawn, hello. You did a wonderful job with this strict challenge. Not an easy task to pull off. Thank you for sponsoring the contest. Many great entries. Loved the pic you chose. I wish you the best of luck, D. It was a great write.

Ron

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for the review and for entering. I love your entry, one of the strongest. Going to be a hard one to pick just one in.

Comment from kathleenspalding

Excellent

I enjoyed this very much, even though the topic is pretty sad. Definitely triggers the emotions, right from the first two words. Good job! And thanks for this good example of Iambic.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for your kind words. You know I've been trying to perfect iambs for years and still struggle, LOL

reply by kathleenspalding on 29-Jan-2016

They ARE tough! Thanks again!

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Well written and well rhymed. I like the love theme and that yor well chosen words let the emotions and feelings come through. Great job!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This poem makes one recall their own specific memories. Whether the memories are of love, separation, sadness or joy they are all sweet because we can recall them and learn from them. Thanks.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Thank so much for taking the time to read and review.

reply by aryr on 29-Jan-2016

most welcome

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I like the last line, 'to be.' It is simple, yet says a lot. To just be is very spiritual and fits into this poem very well. To be is being at one with the world and everything in it. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016

Nice interpretation. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.