Cincinnati
A theme song lyric I wrote for the city of Cincinnati back i10 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Vance. This is wonderful. It expressed fond thoughts of the city and focused on its charms. I like to write about the places I've visited, too. It's a personal snippet of what I liked (or not) about that place. After reading your theme song, now I want to go to Cincinnati! Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hi Vance. This is wonderful. It expressed fond thoughts of the city and focused on its charms. I like to write about the places I've visited, too. It's a personal snippet of what I liked (or not) about that place. After reading your theme song, now I want to go to Cincinnati! Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hi Marilyn: I'm sure Cincinnati has changed quite a bit since I wrote this back in the 1970''s but I still go back there often and have many dear friends there. It has become somewhat "racially" challenged and lots of crime and dismay between the blacks and whites and police (mostly in one old section) but we are still deeply involved with the Cincinnati Ballet (the Lead Ballerina is here with us for Christmas in Las Vegas) but I still call it home and probably always will. Thanks again for your very kind review! Blessings! Vance
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Hi Vance. So nice that the lead ballerina is your guest for Christmas. Lucky you. Yes, I do think large cities have a lot of problems. Not everyone is a responsible citizen. As for me, I lived in NY for many years. Now, happily, living in a tiny town. Marilyn
Comment from Nicolai Andreyevich
Having lived in Cincinnati I can relate to so many of the places mentioned in your song. It seems to fit the city. I would love to hear it put to music. I'm a mediocre musician and you are a professional, so my review is probably not helpful, but I liked the song.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Having lived in Cincinnati I can relate to so many of the places mentioned in your song. It seems to fit the city. I would love to hear it put to music. I'm a mediocre musician and you are a professional, so my review is probably not helpful, but I liked the song.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Dear Nicholai: I love your name and glad to meet you! I shall look forward to sharing your works here on FS and hope to see you often! Have a wonderful Holiday season: His Grayness: Vance
Comment from Treischel
This lyrical poem about Cincinatti has stood the test of time well in its description of the place and the hearts of the people. It could even have been written about my town, St. Paul, or almost any town along the Ohio and Mississippi rivers -the steamboats, the river bluffs, friendly people, a good place to raise children. Nicely expressed in flowing verse and rhyme.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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This lyrical poem about Cincinatti has stood the test of time well in its description of the place and the hearts of the people. It could even have been written about my town, St. Paul, or almost any town along the Ohio and Mississippi rivers -the steamboats, the river bluffs, friendly people, a good place to raise children. Nicely expressed in flowing verse and rhyme.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Thanks Treischel, for your kind words! I did love living in Cincinnati and have many fond and grateful memories for my life during those times. Glad you enjoyed this and VERY MERRY CHRISTMAS TO YOU AND YOURS! Vance
Comment from artisart4u
I like your poem about Cincinnati and how the lifestyle is good for the young as well as the old.
It rhymes well and I like how you go from describing the city to living
in the city. I called it in my poem intermingling.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I like your poem about Cincinnati and how the lifestyle is good for the young as well as the old.
It rhymes well and I like how you go from describing the city to living
in the city. I called it in my poem intermingling.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Many thanks artisart4u. Your words are encouraging and I'm hopeful that this brought you a little smile! Merry Christmas! Vance
Comment from writeapoem
I have driven through the city you describe while young at heart. It easy to tell you love the place and it its beauty. The poem is good written by a fella smitten with the town for the young and the young of heart. All the Best
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I have driven through the city you describe while young at heart. It easy to tell you love the place and it its beauty. The poem is good written by a fella smitten with the town for the young and the young of heart. All the Best
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Many thanks writeapoem, for your kind review and generous stars! I'm glad to meet you and wish you the very best for this holiday season. HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from Dom G Robles
I love this poem. It describes vividly a place called Cincinnati, where once the writer stayed and resided in early childhood. The place as she recalls is teeming with beautiful scenes with the people so friendly. It is to the writer nostalgic, and I can feel the essence of what the author is saying. My sincere congratulations.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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I love this poem. It describes vividly a place called Cincinnati, where once the writer stayed and resided in early childhood. The place as she recalls is teeming with beautiful scenes with the people so friendly. It is to the writer nostalgic, and I can feel the essence of what the author is saying. My sincere congratulations.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Hi Dom G, "nice to meet you" and thanks for your kind reflections! I'm just an old sentimental guy that fondly remembers the good old days back then and just wanted to express my GRATITUDE for the memories! Glad you liked it! Happy Holidays! Vance
Comment from Liberty Justice
Poet says Cinncinati is for the very m young and young at heart. Bouncy happy poem praising this city as good place raise children. Here it is safe and people smile at you. Good place to work, also.liberty justice
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Poet says Cinncinati is for the very m young and young at heart. Bouncy happy poem praising this city as good place raise children. Here it is safe and people smile at you. Good place to work, also.liberty justice
Comment Written 25-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2015
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Thanks for the kind review Liberty Justice, and I'm glad to meet you and hope to see you often. I shall come and visit your works as well and I hope you have a wonderful holiday season. HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from royowen
Well done with this one, you write your prose/poems in the same way, even now Vance. I need to rework some of my early work, now that I've learnt a little. Magnificent effort my friend, I've never been to Cincinnati my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Well done with this one, you write your prose/poems in the same way, even now Vance. I need to rework some of my early work, now that I've learnt a little. Magnificent effort my friend, I've never been to Cincinnati my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2015
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Dear Roy: Any form of joy or enlightenment I can offer you will never repay the many awesome gifts of faith, love, and inspiration you have given me! Be safe and Blessed this wonderful (and really HOT as my Aussie friends report) Holiday season. Eager to see your next post! Vance
Comment from CallieWVU2
I enjoyed this poem, I did feel that the "ev-ver-ee" was a bit awkward, just seemed out of place to me, maybe if there was more than just one word like that it wouldn't be as awkward for me. Just kind of took me out of the poem a bit.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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I enjoyed this poem, I did feel that the "ev-ver-ee" was a bit awkward, just seemed out of place to me, maybe if there was more than just one word like that it wouldn't be as awkward for me. Just kind of took me out of the poem a bit.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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Thanks Callie for you review and sorry I apparently did not make it clear this was not a POEM but a LYRIC from a song. My intention in breaking up the word 'EVERY' was to make it blend into the rhythm of the song while being read. I guess I should not have attempted to be that clever but thanks anyway for your review. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment from Glasstruth
Sounds like Cincinnati is not for the elderly. I better warn anybody 65 or older that only the very young live there. Don't mind me, just playing around. It's very upbeat. Like these lines:
"Tall building rise like fingers reaching up to touch the sun
The river flows beneath where steamboat races still are run
And all around its seven hills are nature's works of art
It's Cincinnati...Cincinnati...a place for the young
The very young
And, the young at heart."
Here I can see a picture. Love the part about fingers reaching to touch the sun. I can also see this as a theme song for something taking place in Cincinnati. Great flow. Very smooth writing. Merry Christmas! Les
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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Sounds like Cincinnati is not for the elderly. I better warn anybody 65 or older that only the very young live there. Don't mind me, just playing around. It's very upbeat. Like these lines:
"Tall building rise like fingers reaching up to touch the sun
The river flows beneath where steamboat races still are run
And all around its seven hills are nature's works of art
It's Cincinnati...Cincinnati...a place for the young
The very young
And, the young at heart."
Here I can see a picture. Love the part about fingers reaching to touch the sun. I can also see this as a theme song for something taking place in Cincinnati. Great flow. Very smooth writing. Merry Christmas! Les
Comment Written 24-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2015
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Merry Christmas Les and thanks for the review. I hope you also have a very merry Christmas: Vance