To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "A Fickle Majesty's Rule"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Sefiros
I found myself remembering the sun and moon in Norse mythology: always being chased by wolves, only to be swallowed at the time of ragnarok. This relationship coincides with the poem's cycial nature. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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I found myself remembering the sun and moon in Norse mythology: always being chased by wolves, only to be swallowed at the time of ragnarok. This relationship coincides with the poem's cycial nature. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2015
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I love the connection you made. Thank you very much. mikey
Comment from Leineco
Those who live at a distance idolize the myth
of her serene beauty, the romantic nature of
her whispered promises and moonlit splendor
but those who live with her tantrums and her
hunger are not so easily lulled, are ever aware
of her fickleness... and her power.
You have written a powerful reminder, for those
who are pacified by her deceptive tranquility.
Nicely done Michael!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Those who live at a distance idolize the myth
of her serene beauty, the romantic nature of
her whispered promises and moonlit splendor
but those who live with her tantrums and her
hunger are not so easily lulled, are ever aware
of her fickleness... and her power.
You have written a powerful reminder, for those
who are pacified by her deceptive tranquility.
Nicely done Michael!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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I just adore these words. So poetic themselves and exactly what I was going for. Thank you so much. Big smiles!! mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
water is the mistress of the sea she can be kind when she wants and let you run and sit upon her shore or she can reek havoc
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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water is the mistress of the sea she can be kind when she wants and let you run and sit upon her shore or she can reek havoc
Comment Written 16-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Love the way you put that. You must be a poet yourself. :)) mikey
Comment from Domino 2
Excellent personification of the vengeful ocean who wants to show those softie humans who's boss and who has the power, with the help of his friend the moon, to create the devastating Tsunami and gorge upon the 'fools' who dared show 'discourtesy' and lack of respect.
'rise up in frustration' - excellent double-meaning.
Too many other excellent lines to highlight in this top free verse.
Very powerful and dramatic, Mikey, and thanks for creating the contest. I reckon you could well have the winner here.
I haven't got further than a 'puddle of dewdrops' with my entry, and that's the truth.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
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Excellent personification of the vengeful ocean who wants to show those softie humans who's boss and who has the power, with the help of his friend the moon, to create the devastating Tsunami and gorge upon the 'fools' who dared show 'discourtesy' and lack of respect.
'rise up in frustration' - excellent double-meaning.
Too many other excellent lines to highlight in this top free verse.
Very powerful and dramatic, Mikey, and thanks for creating the contest. I reckon you could well have the winner here.
I haven't got further than a 'puddle of dewdrops' with my entry, and that's the truth.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
YIKES! This is marvelous, Mikey - stunning! You captured and mesmerized from that first stanza: "...I fear the sun pays not the slightest attention to us..."
Wonderful use of poetic device with beautifully flowing internal rhyme, not overly done alliteration, and that presentation - wow. I'm kinda glad I didn't try for this one! LOL.
Best of luck!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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YIKES! This is marvelous, Mikey - stunning! You captured and mesmerized from that first stanza: "...I fear the sun pays not the slightest attention to us..."
Wonderful use of poetic device with beautifully flowing internal rhyme, not overly done alliteration, and that presentation - wow. I'm kinda glad I didn't try for this one! LOL.
Best of luck!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Hi, Dawn
Wow. I'm so delighted with your kind words and all the stars. I REALLY liked this one even though I got thrashed. Hahaha!
I'm pleased you enjoyed and appreciated it. Thank you so very much. It always means so much more when a real poet acknowledges you. :)) mikey
Comment from doggymad
This was well penned with a Shakespearean feel to it. It was a difficult contest prompt but you have achieved it with style.
Best of luck with this one
hugs
Freda
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This was well penned with a Shakespearean feel to it. It was a difficult contest prompt but you have achieved it with style.
Best of luck with this one
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh excellently done.
I did not get it in the beginning but as I read I knew what the present tense was.
You spoke with a beautiful wonderment and I was in awe with the personification.
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Oh excellently done.
I did not get it in the beginning but as I read I knew what the present tense was.
You spoke with a beautiful wonderment and I was in awe with the personification.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
I cannot think of anyone who writes like this. It really is amazing. Poetry to the max. So rich in metaphor. It is just a thrill to read. Exceptional is an ubderstatement.
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I cannot think of anyone who writes like this. It really is amazing. Poetry to the max. So rich in metaphor. It is just a thrill to read. Exceptional is an ubderstatement.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mikey, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, A wonderful free verse poem full of brilliant metaphor and a beautiful personification of the sea, the alliteration used is excellent too, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mikey, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, A wonderful free verse poem full of brilliant metaphor and a beautiful personification of the sea, the alliteration used is excellent too, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
These words move in and out like the tide. I like how the ocean tells of its feelings about lovers who stay ashore and sailors who take to the sea and how it has the power to end their existance. It shows that the water can be deceptively calm before the worst storm that leaves ships sunk and those on land devistated by loss.
Well done.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
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These words move in and out like the tide. I like how the ocean tells of its feelings about lovers who stay ashore and sailors who take to the sea and how it has the power to end their existance. It shows that the water can be deceptively calm before the worst storm that leaves ships sunk and those on land devistated by loss.
Well done.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015