"Broken Pieces"{Book #30}
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Broken Pieces!"Poems fuscused on my accident.
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Comment from barkingdog
This is funny, Ricky1024. It's quite an imaginative way to tell about a motorcycle accident. The personification of the body parts works very well. I understood what happened.
I think at the end Nerves should be the one sending Legs to the liquor store. You have it the other way around. That's the only suggestion I have.
Fun read.
:) e
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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This is funny, Ricky1024. It's quite an imaginative way to tell about a motorcycle accident. The personification of the body parts works very well. I understood what happened.
I think at the end Nerves should be the one sending Legs to the liquor store. You have it the other way around. That's the only suggestion I have.
Fun read.
:) e
Comment Written 07-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Mucho mucho thanko youo!
Will change it and the others to come.
Ricky 1024
Comment from Zue65
This is a humor fiction but it feels like a satire against God, a mockery of His Divinity, a mockery of Jesus, our Savior. I like wit and humor, for it entertains us but there is a thin line between acceptable humor and that of those which will offend the sensibilities of others in their faith. But I won't be offended enough to kill. LOL. God loves you, please remember that. all the best.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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This is a humor fiction but it feels like a satire against God, a mockery of His Divinity, a mockery of Jesus, our Savior. I like wit and humor, for it entertains us but there is a thin line between acceptable humor and that of those which will offend the sensibilities of others in their faith. But I won't be offended enough to kill. LOL. God loves you, please remember that. all the best.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Well as His messanger I do!
But do you too?
Ricky 1024
And my leg too!
Comment from Loren (7)
Almost sounds like an out of body experience, but then I'd have to wonder who is writing it? I can see the dialogue going on between all the characters and its easy to understand their questions and concerns. A very unique story line to say the least. I might have missed it, but were you wearing a helmet? Loren
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Almost sounds like an out of body experience, but then I'd have to wonder who is writing it? I can see the dialogue going on between all the characters and its easy to understand their questions and concerns. A very unique story line to say the least. I might have missed it, but were you wearing a helmet? Loren
Comment Written 06-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Just me with an eighteeen inch titanium rod in that leg!
OUCH!!!
Thanks,
Ricky1024
And Can you help me in the shower?
LOL!